Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-04
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The line graph evidently presents the information that number of participants involved in various activities conducted at social center at Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Some of activities remained unchanged, while some seen decline and some of other seen increments.
Activities in film club remained same throughout the comparison and amature dramas had seen a great decline.
From 2000, number of participants involving film club remained still until 2020 with approximately 65 participants. While, musical performances rose from 2005 and reached to almost 20 members in 2022. While amature dramas had seen a great decline from 2005 and there are almost 5 participants in 2022.
However, table tennis got a great acceptance from 2010, in 2022 it reached to 55 participants.
Nevertheless, martial arts shown some small ups and downs but remained almost the same throughout the period.
However, film clubs seen constant acceptance till
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which negatively impacts the score. While you have identified some main features, the analysis is incomplete and ends abruptly mid-sentence. You have attempted to report on the trends for film club, musical performances, amateur dramas, table tennis, and martial arts, but the lack of a concluding summary and the unfinished nature of the text prevent a full development of the task. To improve, ensure you provide a clear overview of the main trends and complete all sentences to ensure the information is fully communicated.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay lacks a clear structure. While there is an attempt at paragraphing, the ideas are not logically sequenced, and the abrupt ending disrupts the flow of information. Cohesive devices are used, such as 'However' and 'Nevertheless', but they are often used incorrectly or repetitively, making the progression feel mechanical. The referencing is sometimes unclear, and the lack of a cohesive conclusion makes the overall arrangement feel disjointed. Improving the use of linking words and ensuring each paragraph has a clear focus would significantly enhance the coherence of your writing.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The range of vocabulary is limited and repetitive. You frequently use basic verbs like 'seen' or 'remained' and phrases like 'great decline' or 'great acceptance'. There are also issues with word choice and collocation, such as 'amature dramas' (spelling error: amateur) and 'got a great acceptance'. To reach a higher band, you should aim to use more precise vocabulary to describe trends, such as 'fluctuated', 'remained stable', or 'experienced a significant downturn'. Expanding your range of descriptive adjectives and adverbs will help you convey information more accurately and professionally.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. There are consistent issues with article usage ('the number', 'at a social center'), subject-verb agreement ('some seen decline'), and tense consistency. Sentence structures are generally simple, and the attempt at complex structures often results in errors, such as 'While amature dramas had seen a great decline... and there are almost 5 participants'. Punctuation is also inconsistent. Focusing on basic sentence construction and proofreading for common errors like missing articles and incorrect verb forms will help improve your accuracy.
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