Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-04
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The line graph provides data about the number of participants for five different activities at a social center in Melbourne, Australia, for the period of twenty years: 2000 to 2020.
Overall, three activities showed an upward trend, while the table tennis category stabilized, and the amateur dramatics class witnessed a downward trend throughout the period of two decades.
Firstly, Film Club individuals declined from 64 in 2000 to 61 in 2005 and then moved to 60 in 2010. Participants of martial arts dropped from 38 in 2000 to 31 in 2005, then with a slight increase, stayed at 38 in 2010. The participation of amateurs jumped from 27 in 2000 to 29 in 2010 before falling to 20 in 2010. The number of table tennis participants rose to 20 in 2005 as compared to 18 in 2000. From 2005 to 2010, the table witnessed a plateaued trend and stayed at 20 in 2010. There was no participation in the musical category from 2000 to 2005, but in 2010 it showed significant growth with 12 participants.
In 2015, the musical category surpassed the amateur class and stayed at 17, while table tennis participants surpassed the martial arts category and climbed to 36. Film club participation slightly increased and moved to 63, while 65 at the end of the period. Martial arts and musical performance showed upward trajectoy to stay at 62 and 19 participants, respectively. Conversely, amateur category faced a downward trend and dropped to 7 participants in 2020.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers all parts of the task and provides a clear overview of the trends. You successfully identified the main features, such as the upward trends and the decline in amateur dramatics. However, there are some inaccuracies in the data reporting. For example, you stated that amateur participation fell to 20 in 2010, but the graph shows a different figure. Additionally, the description of the musical category is slightly confusing regarding the timeline. To improve, ensure that the data points cited align precisely with the graph to avoid misinterpretation of the information provided.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The essay is logically organized into paragraphs, with a clear introduction, overview, and body paragraphs. You use some cohesive devices like 'Firstly', 'In 2015', and 'Conversely' to guide the reader. However, the progression of ideas within the body paragraphs is sometimes mechanical, and the referencing is occasionally unclear, particularly when discussing the shifts between categories. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring that each paragraph has a clear thematic focus would enhance the flow of your writing.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'upward trend', 'stabilized', 'plateaued', and 'surpassed'. There are some minor inaccuracies, such as 'amateurs' used to refer to the 'amateur dramatics' category, which is slightly imprecise. You also have a few awkward phrasings like 'upward trajectoy' (spelling error) and 'table witnessed a plateaued trend'. To reach a higher band, focus on using more precise collocations and ensuring that your vocabulary is consistently accurate throughout the report.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, which is appropriate for this task. There are some grammatical errors, such as 'the table witnessed a plateaued trend' (referring to the category as a table) and 'Film club individuals declined' (should be 'participation in the Film Club'). Punctuation is generally fine, but there are occasional slips in sentence construction that slightly affect clarity. To improve, focus on subject-verb agreement and ensure that your complex sentences are constructed with precision.
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