Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-04
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The line graph evidently presents the information that number of participants involved in various activities conducted at social center at Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020. Some of activities remained unchanged, while some seen decline and some of other seen increments. Activities in film club remained same throughout the comparison and amature dramas had seen a great decline. From 2000, number of participants involving film club remained still until 2020 with approximately 65 participants. While, musical performances rose from 2005 and reached to almost 20 members in 2022. While amature dramas had seen a great decline from 2005 and there are almost 5 participants in 2022. However, table tennis got a great acceptance from 2010, in 2022 it reached to 55 participants. Nevertheless, martial arts shown some small ups and downs but remained almost the same throughout the period. However, film clubs seen constant acceptance till the year 2022
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response identifies some main features, but the analysis is inconsistent and contains factual inaccuracies regarding the data provided. For instance, the prompt specifies a period ending in 2020, yet you repeatedly refer to 2022, which is not present in the graph. While you attempt to cover the different activities, the lack of precision in reporting the data points and the inclusion of non-existent years significantly impacts the clarity of the summary. To improve, ensure you strictly adhere to the provided data and focus on highlighting clear trends and comparative peaks rather than listing individual points in a fragmented manner.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The response is organized into a single paragraph, which lacks the necessary structure for a clear report. While there is an attempt to use cohesive devices such as 'However' and 'Nevertheless', these are often used incorrectly or repetitively, creating a mechanical flow. The progression of ideas is disjointed, as the transition between different activities is abrupt. To achieve a higher band, you should group related information into distinct paragraphs (e.g., an overview, followed by two body paragraphs) and use a wider variety of linking words to connect your observations more naturally.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is somewhat limited and repetitive. You frequently use basic phrases like 'remained same' or 'seen a great decline'. There are also issues with word choice and collocation, such as 'got a great acceptance' and 'amature dramas' (spelling error). While the meaning is generally conveyed, the lack of precise, academic vocabulary prevents a higher score. You should aim to incorporate more varied verbs and nouns to describe trends, such as 'fluctuated', 'remained stable', or 'experienced a significant downturn', and ensure accurate spelling of key terms.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede the flow of reading. There are consistent issues with article usage (e.g., 'number of participants involved in various activities'), subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'some seen decline'), and tense consistency. The sentence structures are relatively simple, and attempts at more complex sentences often result in errors. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, particularly the correct use of articles and verb tenses when describing past data, and proofread carefully to eliminate minor slips.
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