Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-04
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 6.0)
The line graph illustrates the information on the number of participants for different activites at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia in 2000 to 2020.
Overall, the film club remained the most popular activity throughout the period, while table tennis experienced the most significant growth. In contrast, amateur dramatics declined considerably, whereas martial arts showed some fluctuations.
The number of participants for film club were around 64 in 2000. Then, it slightly decreased to 60 and further increased to around 66 in 2020.
In contrast, martial arts started with around 36 participants in 2000, but in 2005 in decreased to around 31 participants. After some fluctuations, it was approximately 37 participants in 2020. while amateur dramatics started with around 27 participants in 2000 and it slightly increased to 29 in 2005, then the figure significantly declined to 7 participants in 2020.
Table tennis showed an remarkable upward trend. Beginning with just about 16 participants in 2000. It soared to approximately 54 in 2020, while musical performances started with scratch in 2000. Then the figure increased to about 12 participants in 2010 and reaching around 18 participants in 2020.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5
The response successfully identifies the main trends and provides a clear overview. You have selected key features, such as the film club's popularity and the significant growth of table tennis, and made relevant comparisons between the categories. The data is generally accurate, although there are minor issues with the presentation of the 'musical performances' data (e.g., 'started with scratch'). To reach a higher band, ensure that all data points are described with precision and that the overview clearly synthesizes the most significant trends across the entire period rather than just listing them.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The essay is logically organized into clear paragraphs, with an introduction, an overview, and body paragraphs focusing on different activities. The progression of ideas is generally smooth. However, the use of cohesive devices is occasionally mechanical or slightly awkward, such as the abrupt transition in the final paragraph ('while musical performances started...'). Additionally, some sentences are fragmented or lack proper linking, which affects the flow. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring that each paragraph has a clear thematic focus would enhance the overall coherence.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'significant growth', 'fluctuations', and 'upward trend' effectively. However, there are some inaccuracies in word choice and collocation, such as 'started with scratch' (which is non-standard) and 'an remarkable' (a grammatical error affecting lexical precision). To improve, focus on using more precise collocations for describing trends and ensure that articles are used correctly with adjectives. The vocabulary is sufficient to convey the meaning clearly, but lacks the sophistication required for a higher band.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is generally clear, there are several grammatical errors, such as subject-verb agreement ('The number of participants... were') and punctuation issues (e.g., starting a sentence with 'Beginning with...'). There are also minor errors in preposition use and article placement. While these errors do not impede communication, they occur frequently enough to prevent a higher score. Focusing on proofreading for basic subject-verb agreement and sentence fragments would significantly improve the accuracy of your writing.
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