Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-04
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 6.5)
The given graph illustrates the information of numbers of people participated in different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia between 2000 to 2020.
Overall, film club is the most popular among all activities during the whole period, whereas table tennis displayed the significant growth in number of participant during the second half of peroid and ended up with the second most popular activity. Amateur dramatics displayed a major decline and became the least popular among all activities.
Film club recorded a slight decline in the number of participants from 64 to 60 between 2000 and 2010, respectively. After this, this activity recovered the loss and regain the same number of participants again (64) in 2020 and stood at top. Martial Arts displayed the slight fluctuations but the number of participants were same (37) in 2000 and 2020.
Amateur dramatics slightly rose from 37 in 2000 to 39 in 2005 followed by a continuous decline and ended up as the least popular activity, fell to under 10 in 2020. Table tennis rose throughout the peroid but a sharp increase is recorded between 2010 and 2020, started from 17 in 2000 and ended with over 50 in 2020. Musical performances started in 2005 and participants increased to 20 in 2020.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 6.0 |
| Overall | 6.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5
The response effectively covers the main features of the graph, including the overall trends and specific data points for the various activities. You have successfully identified the most popular activity (Film club), the significant growth of table tennis, and the decline of amateur dramatics. The overview is clear and provides a good summary of the trends. However, to reach a higher band, ensure that all data points are accurate; for instance, you mentioned the Film club participants were 64 in 2000 and 2010, but the graph shows a slight dip in 2010. Overall, the task is well-addressed with relevant comparisons.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5
The essay is logically organized with a clear introduction, an overview, and body paragraphs that group information by activity. The progression of ideas is easy to follow. You use some cohesive devices such as 'whereas', 'after this', and 'followed by', which help the flow of the text. However, the use of cohesive devices is sometimes a bit mechanical. To improve, try to vary your linking phrases and ensure that the transition between sentences is smoother. The paragraphing is appropriate and contributes to the overall clarity of the report.
Lexical Resource — Band 6.0
You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'significant growth', 'slight fluctuations', and 'major decline'. There are some minor errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'participated in different activities' (should be 'participation in') and 'peroid' (spelling). You also use 'regain the same number' which is slightly awkward. While the vocabulary is sufficient to convey your meaning clearly, incorporating more precise academic collocations would elevate the response to a higher band.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0
You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are several grammatical slips, such as 'numbers of people participated' (should be 'number of people participating') and 'the number of participants were same' (should be 'was the same'). Additionally, there are minor punctuation and article errors throughout the text. While these errors do not impede communication, they occur frequently enough to prevent a higher score. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and consistent tense usage will help improve your accuracy.
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