Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-04
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 6.0)
The line graph provides data about five different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia over twenty years.
Overall, film club activity remained highest by participants. The Martial arts remained stable over the period with slight fluctuations. The table tennis rose significantly as compared to other activities. The number of participants for Amateur dramatics declined substantially over twenty years.
It can be observed that number of participants for the activity of table tennis started at 15 but surged dramatically after 2010, reaching 50 by 2020. Conversely, the activity of Amateur dramatics significantly dropped from 29 by 2005 to 5 by 2020.
Film club activity and martial arts remained stable over the period at 60 and 35 respectively by 2020. Number of participants for these activities were highest as compare to all other activities.
Only musical performance activity started in 2005 and number of participants for the activity from 10 to 15 by 2020.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 6.0 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5
The response covers all key features of the graph, including the trends for all five activities. You have successfully identified the main features, such as the rise in table tennis and the decline in amateur dramatics. However, the overview could be more precise; for instance, stating that film club remained the 'highest' is accurate, but the description of the musical performance is incomplete as it lacks a clear starting point or a complete sentence structure. While the main features are reported, the analysis of the data could be more integrated to better highlight the comparisons between the activities throughout the period.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The essay is logically organized into an introduction, an overview, and body paragraphs. You use some cohesive devices, such as 'Conversely' and 'Overall', to link ideas. However, the progression within the final paragraph is weak; the sentence 'Only musical performance activity started in 2005 and number of participants for the activity from 10 to 15 by 2020' is grammatically incomplete and lacks a clear connection to the previous points. Paragraphing is used, but the transition between the general overview and the specific data points could be smoother to improve the overall flow of the report.
Lexical Resource — Band 6.0
You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'surged', 'fluctuations', and 'substantially'. These words help convey the trends effectively. There are some minor issues with word choice and collocation, such as 'as compare to' instead of 'compared to' and 'number of participants for the activity from 10 to 15', which is missing a verb. To reach a higher band, focus on using more varied and precise reporting verbs and ensuring that your comparisons are phrased naturally.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0
The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While you successfully use some complex sentences, there are several grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. For example, 'The Martial arts remained stable' (unnecessary article) and 'Number of participants for these activities were highest' (missing article). The final sentence is a fragment, as it lacks a main verb to describe the change in participation. Improving your control over articles and ensuring every sentence has a clear subject-verb structure will significantly enhance your score.
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