Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-04

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 6.5)

The line graph illustrates the number of participants involve in five categories of activities at a social centre located in Melbourne in Australia between 2000 and 2020.

Overall, it is evident that the number of people that participated in film club maintained the highest figure within the given timeframe, whereas people who attended musical performances section started with lowest number of people but overtook amateur dramatic participants before the end of the period.

Regarding participants in film club, martial art and amateur dramatics, people who attended film club stood at roughly 64 in 2000, it slightly fluctuated reaching 2020 with a figure just below 68 number of people. Similarly, martial arts recorded a number of people just below 38, followed by an upward and downward trend which eventually peaked at roughly 38 number of people in 2020. Conversely, the number of people in amateur dramatics reported an approximate figure of 26 participants, it rose slightly to 30 people in 2005 and then declined steadily reaching 2020 at a figure below 8 people.

Turning to people who choose table tennis and musical performances, participants in table tennis stood at a value just below 19 in 2000, in 2010 it overtook the number of people in amateur dramatics and rose substantially. In 2015, the number of table tennis members had already overtook martial arts figure and it peaked at a figure around 55 people in 2020. However, participants in musical performance recorded zero members in 2000 and 2005, before 2010 it rose significantly to roughly 10 people, then it matches the number of table tennis members before 2015 and relative increased before levelling off at roughly 20 people in 2020.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

The response successfully covers all five categories and identifies key trends over the 20-year period. You have provided a clear overview and selected relevant data points to support your descriptions. However, there are some inaccuracies in the data reporting; for instance, you mention musical performances 'matches the number of table tennis members before 2015', which is not clearly supported by the graph. Additionally, the description of the film club as 'slightly fluctuated' is a bit vague given the steady nature of the line. To improve, ensure that your comparisons are precise and that you avoid over-generalising trends that are not clearly visible in the data.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 7.0

The essay is logically organised into clear paragraphs, with an introduction, an overview, and two body paragraphs focusing on different activity groups. The progression of ideas is generally smooth. You use a range of cohesive devices such as 'Similarly', 'Conversely', and 'Turning to', which helps the reader follow the narrative. However, some transitions are slightly mechanical, and the referencing is occasionally repetitive (e.g., 'the number of people' is used frequently). Improving the variety of your linking phrases and using more sophisticated referencing would help elevate the flow of the text.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'fluctuated', 'peaked', 'substantially', and 'levelling off'. There are some minor errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'participants involve' (should be 'involved') and 'musical performances section' (should be 'musical performances category'). You also tend to repeat the phrase 'number of people' excessively, which limits the precision of your writing. To reach a higher band, try to incorporate more varied synonyms for 'participants' or 'figures' and ensure collocations are natural.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

The response uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is generally clear, there are several grammatical slips, such as 'participants involve' instead of 'involved', 'started with lowest number' (missing article), and 'had already overtook' (incorrect verb tense/form). Some sentences are slightly clunky, such as 'it matches the number of table tennis members before 2015 and relative increased'. To improve, focus on subject-verb agreement and the correct use of past participles. Despite these errors, the grammar does not impede communication.

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