Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-05
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The line graph illustrates a comparison on the different individuals for numerous interests at one social center in Melbourne, Australia for the duration of interval between 2000 and 2020.
Overall, there were different activities in which number of locals in table tennis were sharply increased and much of locals were participate in film club then any of other activity.
The number of citizens in film club from 2000 to 2020 were most of any other movement. In 2000 there were 65 locals nevertheless, in 2020 they were increased up to 70 citizens.
In addition, number of participants in martial arts were fluctuated. In 2000 there were 35 citizens and in 2005 there were 30 participants. And again in 2010 its slightly increased. The activity of amateur dramatics have considerably good in 2000 that around 25 people take part but its sharply decline from 2005 to 2020.Moreoever, its reached to total 5 participants.
Locals take part in musical performances from 2005 onwards. Its gradually increased up to 2020.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers the main features of the graph, such as the film club's popularity and the decline in amateur dramatics. However, the overview is somewhat weak and lacks clarity. While you identify some trends, the description of the data is occasionally inaccurate or confusing, such as stating that the number of locals in table tennis 'sharply increased' without providing specific data points to support this. To improve, ensure that your overview highlights the most significant trends clearly and that all data points mentioned are accurate and directly supported by the graph provided.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate. For example, the transition 'nevertheless' is used incorrectly in the context of comparing data points, and the use of 'And' and 'Moreoever' at the start of sentences is repetitive and lacks sophistication. The progression of ideas is sometimes disjointed, particularly when moving between different activities. To improve, focus on using a wider variety of linking words and ensure they are used in the correct context to create a smoother flow between sentences and paragraphs.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks the precision and variety expected at higher bands. You rely on basic terms like 'number of citizens' and 'locals' repeatedly. There are also issues with word choice and collocation, such as 'movement' to describe an activity and 'considerably good' to describe a trend. To reach a higher band, try to incorporate more specific academic vocabulary related to data description, such as 'fluctuated', 'peaked', 'declined', or 'remained stable', and ensure these are used with correct collocations.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Common issues include subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'number of participants... were fluctuated'), incorrect tense usage, and awkward phrasing (e.g., 'much of locals were participate'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with sentence boundaries. To improve, focus on mastering basic subject-verb agreement and ensuring that your verb tenses are consistent when describing past data. Proofreading for small errors like missing articles or incorrect prepositions will also help improve your accuracy.
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