Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-05
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The graph illustrate the information on the number of participants for different five activities at one social center in Melbourne, Australia. Whereas, film club was accounted highest while, amateur dramatics had minimum, and Martial arts was average.
In 2000, film club above 60 percentage number of participants, It was decline in 2005, after that in 2010 it had reached at 60% and settle below 70 % in 2020. Martial arts was below 40% after that it was down and make zig-zag a pattern till 2020. It had average all over the graph.
In 2020, Armature dramatics approximately 27% were participants. While it increased and reached to 30% in 2005. After that it had decline and reached to 5%. Which was minimum in graph. Table tennis had lie 15% after that it rose and reached to 20% in 2005. Moreover it had steady during 2005 to 2010. However it had marginally peak and reached to 55% in 2020.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response covers the main features of the graph, but the analysis is inconsistent. While you identify the highest and lowest activities, the description of trends is often inaccurate or confusing. For example, stating that Martial arts had an 'average' trend is vague, and the description of the film club's fluctuations is difficult to follow. You have attempted to select key data points, but the lack of clarity in reporting these figures prevents a full overview. To improve, focus on grouping data logically (e.g., activities that increased vs. those that decreased) and ensure that the data points cited are accurate and clearly linked to the years provided.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organised into paragraphs, but the logical progression is weak. The use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or misused, such as starting sentences with 'Whereas,' or 'After that,' which creates a disjointed flow. Referencing is sometimes unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the comparison between different activities. The transition between the introduction and the body paragraphs is abrupt. To improve, use a wider variety of linking words (e.g., 'In contrast,' 'Subsequently,' 'Furthermore') and ensure that each paragraph has a clear focus, such as grouping activities by their overall trend rather than listing them activity by activity.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and repetitive, which restricts the ability to describe the data precisely. There are several instances of incorrect word choice, such as 'Armature dramatics' (Amateur dramatics), 'had lie' (lay at), and 'marginally peak' (peaked). These errors occasionally cause confusion. While you attempt to use some descriptive terms like 'fluctuate' or 'decline,' the overall range is insufficient for a higher band. To improve, focus on learning specific collocations for describing graphs, such as 'a significant increase,' 'remained steady,' or 'reached a peak of.'
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that impede communication. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'The graph illustrate'), tense usage (e.g., 'It was decline'), and sentence structure (e.g., 'Which was minimum in graph'). The use of simple sentence structures is predominant, and attempts at more complex sentences often result in errors. Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with the use of commas and capitalization. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, ensuring that every sentence has a clear subject and verb, and proofreading for common errors like missing articles and incorrect verb forms.
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