Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-05

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

the given line chart compares the information about five different activities in social centre located in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Overall, the film club take the dominance of highest amount of participants throughout the period, while table tennis experienced the most significant growth in compare with other four sections. In contrast, amateur dramatics decreased very sharply, and in 2015 it becomes the least popular activity by the end of the period.

In 2000, around 64 people attented the film club, and being stable until a slight decrease to approximately 60 in 2010. But it quickly recovered to about 64 in 2015 and marginally up to 66 at the end. The number of participants in martial arts changed slightly over the year, varying over 31 and 36 people before finishing at about 33 in 2020.

Table tennis, however, showed the good growth, starting at 16 participants in 2000, the line rose slightly to over 19 in 2010 before growing dramatically to about 51 by 2020. Meanwhile, amateur dramatics fell significantly starting from 25 participant to just 3 over the same period. In cotrast, Musical performances, which had 0 participants until 2005, rose gradually until finishing at about 16 by 2020.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

The response covers all key features of the graph, including the trends for all five activities. You successfully identified the main trends, such as the dominance of the film club and the dramatic growth of table tennis. The overview is clear and highlights the most significant changes. However, the report could be improved by ensuring data points are consistently accurate; for instance, you mentioned amateur dramatics fell to '3', which is a specific detail that adds value. The comparison between categories is generally well-handled, though some parts of the data description could be more precise to fully meet the requirements for a higher band.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is logically organized into an introduction, an overview, and two body paragraphs. The progression of ideas is clear, moving from the general trends to specific data points. You use cohesive devices such as 'In contrast', 'Meanwhile', and 'However' to link ideas effectively. While the paragraphing is appropriate, the transition between the overview and the body paragraphs could be slightly smoother. The use of referencing is generally clear, though some sentences feel slightly disjointed due to minor errors in sentence structure, which occasionally affects the flow of information.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

You demonstrate a sufficient range of vocabulary to convey information clearly. Phrases like 'take the dominance', 'most significant growth', and 'fell significantly' are effective. However, there are some inaccuracies in word choice and collocation, such as 'in compare with' (should be 'compared to') and 'being stable' (should be 'remained stable'). Additionally, 'marginally up to' is not standard phrasing. While these errors do not impede communication, they prevent the response from reaching a higher band. Expanding your range of synonyms for 'increase' and 'decrease' would further enhance your score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The response uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are several grammatical errors, such as subject-verb agreement issues ('film club take' instead of 'takes', 'amateur dramatics... becomes' instead of 'became') and preposition errors ('varying over 31 and 36' instead of 'between'). Punctuation is generally functional, but there are minor slips that occur throughout the text. While these errors do not prevent the reader from understanding the data, they are frequent enough to limit the score. Focusing on consistent verb tense usage—especially when describing past data—will help improve your accuracy.

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