Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-06
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The line graph illustrates the number of participants who participate in various activities at social club in Melbourne, Australia between 2000 and 2020.
Overall, film club recorded the highest number of participants, making it the popular figure throughout the period, while both table tennis and amateur dramatics showed a opposite pattern at end of the period. Musical performances remained the lowest figure over the period.
Film club experienced the large number of participants, starting from 65 in 2000 and ending at 67 in 2020, with a minimally dip at 60 in 2010, while remained the popular figure over the period given. The figure of material arts showed a fluctuation across the given period, while the starting and ending point was roughly same at 36 participants. Amateur dramatics saw a considerable decline at 5 participants in 2020 while overtaking table tennis, before showing a slight increase at 30 participants in 2005.
Additionally, the figure for table tennis increased, starting at 28 participants, then rocketed at 52 participants in 2020. lastly, musical performances remained the lowest figure throughout the period from 0 participants in 2005 to 15 participants in 2020.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers all key features of the graph, including the overall trends and specific data points for the various activities. You successfully identified the most popular activity (film club) and the lowest (musical performances). However, the description of the data is occasionally imprecise, such as the statement that martial arts (referred to as 'material arts') had the 'same' starting and ending point, when the graph shows slight variations. Additionally, the description of the amateur dramatics trend is slightly confusing regarding the timeline. To reach a higher band, ensure that data points are reported with greater accuracy and that comparisons between categories are more clearly articulated.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, with an introduction, an overview, and body paragraphs focusing on specific trends. Cohesive devices such as 'Overall', 'while', and 'Additionally' are used to link ideas. However, the flow is occasionally hindered by awkward phrasing, such as 'showed a opposite pattern at end of the period' and 'while remained the popular figure'. The use of referencing is sometimes mechanical, and the transition between the description of the film club and martial arts could be smoother. Improving the variety and precision of your linking words would enhance the overall coherence.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'fluctuation', 'considerable decline', and 'rocketed'. However, there are several instances of word choice errors and inaccuracies, such as 'material arts' instead of 'martial arts', 'minimally dip' instead of 'minimal dip', and 'the popular figure' instead of 'the most popular activity'. These errors occasionally distract the reader. To improve, focus on using collocations correctly and ensuring that your vocabulary is precise enough to describe statistical trends without ambiguity.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is generally clear, there are frequent grammatical errors, such as missing articles ('at social club'), incorrect preposition usage ('at end of the period'), and tense inconsistencies. For example, 'while remained the popular figure' lacks a subject, and 'roughly same' should be 'roughly the same'. These errors are noticeable but do not prevent the reader from understanding the main points. To achieve a higher score, you should focus on subject-verb agreement and the correct use of articles and prepositions.
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