Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-06

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The line graph illustrate the detail on the total participants for various activities at a public center in melbourne, Australia between 2000 to 2020.

Overall, film club was the most popular activity among the people in every year. Table tennis was not much famous in 2000 but it overtake almost every activity and became second popular activity in 2020 while, the popularity of amateur dramatics were droping as the year passes.

Film club has the highest number of participants with 65 people in 2000 and it increase till 2020 by 3 individuals. Martial arts was also famous in people in 2000, 35 people had taken part in it and over the years it was on an averge and in 2020, 1 person was involve. 25 people has taken part in 2000 in Amateur dramatics and a slite rise was observed in 2005 but after that a drastic fall was seen and in 2020 only 5 people had participated in it.

Table tennis was not more popular in 2000, only 16 individuals had taken part and a rise was observed over the year in 2010 and 2015 it overtake amateur dramatics and martial arts, respectively. In 2020, 52 people had taken part. Musical performances had added late in 2005 and till 2020, 15 people git involve in this activity.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

You have successfully identified the main trends and provided a clear overview of the data. You covered all categories and made relevant comparisons, such as noting the rise of table tennis against the decline of amateur dramatics. However, some data points are slightly inaccurate; for instance, you stated the film club increased by 3 individuals, but the graph shows a more significant change. To reach a higher band, ensure your data reporting is precise and avoid minor inaccuracies in interpreting the figures. The overview is well-placed, and the key features are highlighted effectively, which demonstrates a good understanding of the task requirements.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The response is logically organized into paragraphs, with an introduction, an overview, and body paragraphs focusing on specific trends. You use some cohesive devices, such as 'Overall', 'while', and 'after that', to link ideas. However, the flow between sentences is occasionally mechanical, and some transitions feel repetitive. To improve, try to use a wider variety of linking words and ensure that the progression of ideas within paragraphs is smoother. The paragraphing is appropriate, and the information is presented in a way that is easy for the reader to follow, which is a strength.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You have a sufficient range of vocabulary to convey the information clearly, using terms like 'popularity', 'participants', and 'drastic fall'. However, there are some errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'not much famous' instead of 'not very popular' and 'git involve' (a spelling error). You also rely on some repetitive phrasing. To achieve a higher score, focus on using more precise academic vocabulary and ensure correct word forms. Expanding your range of synonyms for 'increase' and 'decrease' would also help demonstrate a more flexible command of the language.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

You demonstrate a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text. Examples include subject-verb agreement issues ('The line graph illustrate', 'popularity of amateur dramatics were droping') and tense inconsistencies ('had added late', 'git involve'). While these errors do not prevent the reader from understanding your meaning, they are frequent enough to impact the overall fluency. To improve, focus on proofreading for basic subject-verb agreement and ensuring consistent verb tenses when describing past trends. Increasing the variety of complex sentence structures would also be beneficial.

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