Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-06
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 6.0)
The given line chart illustrates how many people participated in various activities(Film club,Martial arts ,Amateur dramatics, Table tennis and musical performance)at one social center in Melbourne,Australia from 2000 to 2020.
Overall, table tennis increased dramatically and musical performance also demonstrated gradual increase, while there was a slight change in martial arts sector but at end it reached at its starting level. On the other hand, Amateur dramatics increased until 2005.,after which it continuously declined. Film club participation remained highest throughout the given period.
Furthermore, film club initially had 65 participants and slightly increased to approximately 66 participants in 2020 ,while table tennis started with around 15 participants and saw a significant surge reaching its peak at almost 52 participants in 2020. Musical performance started in 2005 and gradually increased number of participants, with 19 participants in 2020.
Martial arts fluctuated throughout the given period and had almost same number of participants at the ending. In comparison to martial arts, amateur dramatics declined rapidly after 2005 with approximately five participants in 2020, which is least in comparison to all other activities.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5
The response covers all key features of the graph, including the overall trends and specific data points for the five activities. You successfully identified the main trends, such as the dramatic increase in table tennis and the decline in amateur dramatics. However, the description of the film club is slightly inaccurate; you noted it remained the highest, but the graph shows it was overtaken by table tennis by 2020. Additionally, the overview could be more concise by focusing on the most significant movements rather than listing every activity. Overall, the information is well-selected and provides a clear summary of the data provided.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5
The essay is logically organized into an introduction, an overview, and two body paragraphs. The progression of ideas is clear, moving from general trends to specific comparisons. You used cohesive devices such as 'Overall', 'On the other hand', and 'Furthermore' to link ideas effectively. However, some transitions are slightly mechanical, and the punctuation around these devices could be improved (e.g., '2005.,after'). Paragraphing is used appropriately to separate the overview from the detailed analysis, which helps the reader follow the information easily. Overall, the structure is coherent and easy to follow.
Lexical Resource — Band 6.0
You demonstrate a sufficient range of vocabulary to describe trends, such as 'increased dramatically', 'significant surge', and 'continuously declined'. There is some awareness of collocation, though some phrasing is slightly repetitive or imprecise, such as 'martial arts sector' or 'at end it reached at its starting level'. While you successfully use some less common items, there are minor inaccuracies in word choice. To reach a higher band, try to incorporate more varied synonyms for 'increase' and 'decrease' and ensure that collocations are used more naturally in context.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While many sentences are clear, there are several minor grammatical errors, such as missing articles ('at one social center', 'at end'), punctuation issues (the period before the comma after '2005'), and minor preposition errors ('reaching its peak at almost 52'). These errors do not impede communication, but they occur frequently enough to prevent a higher score. To improve, focus on proofreading for small errors like missing articles and ensuring consistent punctuation after introductory phrases or transition words.
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