Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-07
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The provided diagram compares individuals' preference in 5 different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia between 2000 and 2020.
Overall, it is evident that participation in the film club has dominated all other four activities and has remained almost constant throughout. Similarly, individual's interest in table tennis has skyrocketed, whereas popularity of amateur dramatics has dropped the same mid period.
To begin with, film club in the year 2000 had around 65 participants and it remained almost steady throughout the period.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response is significantly under the 150-word minimum requirement, which severely impacts the ability to fully address the task. While you have identified some main features, such as the film club's stability and the rise in table tennis, the report is incomplete. You have not provided data for all categories, nor have you completed the summary of the trends. To reach a higher band, you must provide a full analysis of all data points presented in the graph and ensure the response meets the minimum length requirement to allow for sufficient development of the main features.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The response shows a basic attempt at organization with an introduction and an overview. However, because the text is so short, there is no real progression of ideas. Cohesive devices are used in a limited way, such as 'Overall' and 'To begin with', but the abrupt ending prevents the development of a coherent structure. To improve, ensure that each paragraph has a clear purpose and that you use a wider range of linking words to connect your observations logically throughout the report.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is generally appropriate for the task, with terms like 'skyrocketed' and 'dominated' effectively describing the trends. However, the range is limited due to the brevity of the response. There are minor issues, such as 'individual's interest' (should be plural 'individuals'') and 'dropped the same mid period', which is slightly unclear. To improve, aim to use a broader range of vocabulary to describe trends, such as 'fluctuated', 'remained stable', or 'experienced a sharp decline', and ensure accurate pluralization.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains a mix of simple and some complex sentence structures. There are a few grammatical errors, such as 'individuals' preference' (should be 'preferences') and 'dropped the same mid period', which is syntactically awkward. While the meaning is generally clear, the limited length restricts the opportunity to demonstrate a wide range of grammatical structures. To improve, focus on using a variety of complex sentence forms and ensure subject-verb agreement and correct preposition usage.
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