Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-07
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 6.0)
The graph compares the participation rate across five different activities at a social centre in Melbourne, Austrealia between 2000 to 2020. Overall, fan club events consistently remained the most popular option among participants. Furthermore, table tennis events popularity experienced the sharpest rise, while amateur dramatics events was the only category that saw an overall decrease in participation rates during this period
Fan club activities, dominated the others in terms of participation rates, with figures ranging from 63% in 2000 to 65% in 2020. Martial arts, tabble tennis and musical instruments had also recorded improved participation, with table tennis standing out as the one with the highest rate of improvement as evidenced from their initial value of 18% in 2000 to a staggering 52% in 2020.
In contrast, ameteur dramatics activities, after a slight increase from 26% in 2000 to 28% in 2005, declined rapidly, plummeting to around 8 in 2020.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
The response successfully identifies the main features of the graph, including the overall trend for the most popular activity and the contrasting performance of table tennis and amateur dramatics. You have provided a clear overview and supported your points with relevant data from the graph. To reach a higher band, ensure that all categories are mentioned; while you grouped martial arts, table tennis, and musical instruments, you did not provide specific data points for martial arts or musical instruments, which limits the depth of your analysis. Including specific figures for all categories would provide a more comprehensive summary.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5
The response is logically organized with a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and a concluding summary of trends. The use of cohesive devices such as 'Furthermore', 'In contrast', and 'as evidenced from' helps to guide the reader through the information. Paragraphing is used appropriately to separate the different trends. However, the flow could be improved by ensuring that the transition between the general overview and the specific data points is smoother. The referencing is generally clear, though some minor improvements in sentence-level cohesion would enhance the overall readability.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
You have used a sufficient range of vocabulary to describe trends, such as 'remained the most popular', 'sharpest rise', and 'plummeting'. However, there are several spelling errors, such as 'Austrealia', 'tabble', and 'ameteur', which detract from the quality of the writing. While these errors do not impede communication, they prevent the response from reaching a higher band. To improve, focus on proofreading for common spelling mistakes and try to incorporate more varied synonyms for 'increase' and 'decrease' to demonstrate a wider lexical range.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are some grammatical inaccuracies, such as subject-verb agreement issues (e.g., 'Fan club activities, dominated' and 'amateur dramatics events was'). Additionally, there is a missing unit of measurement in the phrase 'around 8 in 2020'. While these errors are noticeable, they do not cause significant difficulty for the reader. To improve, pay closer attention to subject-verb agreement and ensure that all numerical data is accompanied by the correct units (percentages).
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