Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-07

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The graph below shows the total numbers of individuals participating in different activities Film club, Martial arts, Amateur dramatist, Tables tennis, Musical performances at one social Centre in Melbourne, Australia between 2000 to 2020.

Overall, Film club participants remain at the top level in overall the given period, In contrast, the Amateur dramatist recorded the lowest level. Although, Table tennis experienced a huge surge across all the categories.

Initially, in 2000 Film club stated from 65% and remain steady till 2020 at 68% almost. in contrast, in the year of 2000 Amateur dramatists started using social media from 25% and notably faced a big fall of only 5% in 2020.

Furthermore, the same year of 2000 people of Table tennis start from

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response is significantly under the 150-word minimum, which severely limits the ability to fully address the task. While you have identified some main features, such as the Film Club's stability and the Amateur Dramatist's decline, the response is incomplete and cuts off mid-sentence. Because the task is not finished, you have failed to report on all categories (e.g., Martial Arts and Musical Performances are mentioned in the introduction but never discussed in the body). To improve, you must ensure you provide a complete summary of all data points and meet the minimum word count requirement to allow for a full development of the main features and comparisons.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is organized into an introduction, an overview, and a body paragraph, which is a good start. However, the progression is interrupted by the incomplete nature of the text. Cohesive devices are used, such as 'Overall', 'In contrast', and 'Furthermore', but their effectiveness is undermined by the abrupt ending. The referencing is sometimes unclear, and the paragraphing is not fully utilized to group the data logically. To reach a higher band, ensure that each paragraph has a clear focus and that the transition between sentences is smooth and complete.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, but it is somewhat repetitive and contains inaccuracies. For instance, you used 'stated' instead of 'started' and 'Tables tennis' instead of 'Table tennis'. There is also a confusing reference to 'social media' which is not supported by the graph provided. To improve, focus on using more precise terminology for describing trends, such as 'remained stable', 'experienced a significant decline', or 'witnessed a sharp increase'. Expanding your range of vocabulary will help you describe the data more accurately and professionally.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, including issues with verb tenses ('Film club stated from 65%'), subject-verb agreement, and sentence structure. The punctuation is also inconsistent, with some sentences starting with lowercase letters after a period. The incomplete sentence at the end further impacts the score. To improve, focus on basic sentence construction and proofreading for common errors like tense consistency and capitalization. Practicing complex structures, such as using relative clauses or subordinating conjunctions, will also help you move toward a higher band.

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