Band 7.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 7.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-07
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 7.5)
The line graph shows the number of participants in five different activities at a social centre in Melbourne, Australia, from 2000 to 2020.
Overall, the graph presents five activities: film club, martial arts, amateur dramatics, table tennis and musical performances, and shows how the number of participants changed over the 20-year period. Film club remained the most popular activity, while table tennis saw the biggest increase. In contrast, amateur dramatics experienced a significant decrease.
In 2000, the film club was the most popular activity, with about 64 participants. This number decreased slightly to around 59 in 2010, before rising again to approximately 64 in 2020. The number of participants in martial arts fluctuated throughout the period, starting at about 36 and reaching a peak of 38 in 2010. It then fell slightly to around 34 in 2015 before rising to 36 in 2020.
Table tennis showed an upward trend. Its number of participants increased from about 16 in 2000 to 20 in 2005, and remained at this level in 2010. After that, it increased significantly, reaching around 35 in 2015 and 53 in 2020. Musical performances had no participants in 2000 and 2005, but the number rose to 12 in 2010 and continued to increase slightly to 18 in 2020.
Finally, amateur dramatics increased slightly from 26 participants in 2000 to 28 in 2005. However, the number then decreased considerably, reaching 20 in 2010, 14 in 2015 and only 6 in 2020.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 7.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 7.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 7.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 7.5 |
| Overall | 7.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.5
The response effectively addresses all requirements of the task. You have successfully identified the main trends, such as the film club's stability, the significant growth in table tennis, and the decline in amateur dramatics. The overview is clear and provides a good summary of the data. You have also made relevant comparisons throughout the report, such as contrasting the growth of table tennis with the decline of amateur dramatics. The data is accurately reported, and the structure is logical, ensuring that the reader can easily follow the information presented. To reach a higher band, ensure that you consistently highlight the most significant features rather than listing every data point.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 7.5
The response is well-organized with a clear logical progression. Each paragraph focuses on a specific aspect of the data, which helps the reader navigate the information easily. You have used a variety of cohesive devices, such as 'In contrast', 'However', and 'After that', to link ideas effectively. The paragraphing is appropriate, with a clear introduction, overview, and body paragraphs. The flow of information is smooth, and referencing is clear throughout the text. The use of cohesive devices is natural and contributes to the overall coherence of the response.
Lexical Resource — Band 7.0
You have used a sufficient range of vocabulary to convey the information accurately. Phrases like 'fluctuated throughout the period', 'upward trend', and 'decreased considerably' demonstrate a good command of descriptive language. The vocabulary is appropriate for an academic report and is used with precision. While the range is adequate, incorporating a few more sophisticated or less common lexical items related to data trends (e.g., 'plateaued', 'surged', or 'marginal') could further enhance the quality of your writing. Overall, the vocabulary is precise and contributes to a clear and professional tone.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 7.5
The response demonstrates a good range of grammatical structures, including both simple and complex sentences. You have used a variety of verb tenses correctly to describe past trends. The sentences are generally error-free, and the punctuation is used effectively to support the clarity of your writing. There are no significant grammatical errors that impede communication. To achieve a higher score, you could experiment with more complex sentence structures, such as using participle clauses or more varied subordinating conjunctions, to demonstrate greater flexibility and control over your writing.
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