Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-07
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
This graph illustrates the information of activities of social center in Australia and Melbourne for the period of 2000 to 2020 to make a report on how much % of participants activities in social center
In 2000 the % of film club is 65 %, and it is almost same till 2005 and little bit decrease in 2010 and reached on 60 percentage then it up little higher from 2010 and reached on 68 percentage in 2020
The material arts having unstable graph of percentage participants in 20 years in 2000 38 % and little bit decrease in 2005 30 percentage and little spike in 2010 reached 40 % and maintained this % till 2020
The amateur dramatics is maintained average % from 2000 to 2005 35% and then have a massive decrease till 2020 and reached 10%
the table tennis maintained the average of participants from 2000 to 2010 is 20% and having a massive spike till 2020 and reached on 50%
musical performance starts in 2005 and not having any interest, but it has a good growth from 2010 to 2020 on the participants of 18%
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response covers the main features of the graph, including trends for all categories. However, it lacks an overview or summary statement that highlights the most significant trends or differences, which is a requirement for a Band 6 or higher. The information is presented as a list of individual data points rather than a cohesive report. While the key features are identified, the lack of a clear summary and the tendency to simply list figures without synthesizing the data limits the score. To improve, ensure you include an introductory overview that identifies the most striking trends, such as the overall growth in table tennis versus the decline in amateur dramatics.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The response lacks paragraphing, which makes it difficult to follow. There is no clear logical progression between the different activities described. Cohesive devices are largely absent; the sentences are simply strung together without linking words or transitions (e.g., 'In 2000...', 'The material arts...', 'The amateur dramatics...'). This mechanical listing style prevents the text from flowing smoothly. To improve, use paragraph breaks to separate different trends and employ cohesive devices such as 'in contrast', 'meanwhile', 'subsequently', or 'whereas' to connect ideas and show the relationship between the data points.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is repetitive and limited. Phrases like 'little bit decrease', 'reached on', and 'maintained the average' are used repeatedly. There is little attempt to use a range of vocabulary to describe trends (e.g., 'fluctuated', 'plummeted', 'surged'). Some word choices are inaccurate, such as 'material arts' (should be 'martial arts') and 'not having any interest' to describe a graph line. To improve, incorporate more precise verbs and nouns for describing trends, such as 'experienced a significant decline', 'remained stable', or 'witnessed a sharp increase'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The grammar is characterized by frequent errors that occasionally impede clarity. There is a lack of complex sentence structures; most sentences are simple and follow a repetitive pattern. Punctuation is missing throughout, and there are errors in subject-verb agreement and preposition usage (e.g., 'reached on 60 percentage'). The use of 'the' is inconsistent, and the sentence structure is often fragmented. To improve, focus on using a variety of sentence types, including complex sentences with subordinate clauses, and ensure that basic grammatical rules regarding articles and prepositions are applied consistently.
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