Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-07

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The line graph above illustrates the amount of participants engaging in various activities at a social centre located in Melbourne, Australia from the time period 2000 until 2020. The activities reported include film club, martial arts,amateur daramatics,table tennis and musical performances.

Overall, film club remains the most popular activity throughout the 20 year period, whereas musical performances were the least participated activity, with no participants at all for the first 5 years.. Table tennis saw a steady increase among the number of participants , whereas martial arts maintained a an increasing and decreasing trend. Amateur dramatics rose slightly in the first 5 years before dramatically falling for the rest of the time period.

In 2000, film club showed the most amount of participating members, at 65. Martial arts comes second, with 35 members. Amateur dramatics and table tennis were at 25 members and 15 members each.

In 2005, the amount of participants for film club fell slightly with 62 members. Similarly, martial arts members also fell to 35 members for that year. In contrast, amateur dramatics, table tennis and musical performances showed increased participants with 30 , 20 and 10 members respectively.

In 2010, film club participants again fell slightly to 60 members, martial arts members increased to 40 members, similarly, musical performance also saw popularity with members, totaling 10 members in that year. Amateur dramatics fell significantly, with 20 members in that year, whereas table tennis remained somewhat the same .

In 2015, film club participants increased to 65 members again, martial arts fell to 35 members ,amateur dramatics fell sharply to only 10 members, in contrast to table tennis which rose significantly up to 35 members, similar trend was seen in musical performances with 10 participants.

Finally in 2020, film club rose again to 65 members, martial arts also rose slightly to 38 members. Amateur dramatics fell dramatically and stayed the least participated activity in for that year, with only 3 participants. Table tennis sharply rose to second poplar activity with 50 members, and musical performances also increased in its number of participants , with 15 members in 2020.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response covers all key features of the graph, including the trends for all five activities. You have successfully identified the main trends, such as the film club's dominance and the significant rise of table tennis. However, the report is overly descriptive, listing data for every single year rather than grouping information to highlight key trends and comparisons. This makes the report feel like a list of data points rather than a summary. To reach a higher band, focus on synthesising the data—for example, grouping activities that showed similar trends or highlighting the most significant changes at the start and end of the period.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The response is logically organized with a clear introduction, an overview, and body paragraphs that follow a chronological structure. Paragraphing is used appropriately to separate different time periods. However, the use of cohesive devices is somewhat repetitive, with phrases like 'in 2000', 'in 2005', and 'in 2010' starting almost every paragraph. This creates a mechanical feel. To improve, try using a wider variety of linking words and transition phrases to connect ideas between sentences and paragraphs, such as 'subsequently', 'following this', or 'by contrast', to improve the flow of the text.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

You have a sufficient range of vocabulary to describe the data, using terms like 'steady increase', 'fell sharply', and 'maintained an increasing and decreasing trend'. There are some minor errors in word choice, such as 'amount of participants' (should be 'number of participants') and 'least participated activity' (should be 'least popular activity'). Additionally, there is a spelling error: 'daramatics'. While these errors do not impede communication, they prevent the response from reaching a higher band. Focusing on more precise collocations and ensuring accurate word forms will help improve your score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The response uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are several grammatical slips, such as 'maintained a an increasing' (double article) and inconsistent punctuation around numbers and commas. Some sentences are slightly awkward, such as 'musical performance also saw popularity with members'. While the meaning is always clear, the frequency of these minor errors indicates that you have not yet achieved the level of control required for a higher band. Focusing on proofreading for small errors like articles and prepositions will significantly enhance the quality of your writing.

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