Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-07

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

THE ASSIGNED MULTILINEAR GRAPGH DEPICTS THE INFORMATION OF COUNTING OF PARTICIPANTS WHO SHOWED IN DISTINCT ACTIVITIES AT ONE COMMUNITY CENTRE IN MELBOURNE, AUSTRIALA FROM 2000 TO 2020.

IN GENERAL, DESPITE FLUCTUATIONS SUBSTANTIAL GROWTH WAS OBSERVED IN TABLE TENNIS HOWEVER VISA VERSA IN THE FIELD OF AMATEUR DRAMATICS.

IN DETAIL, FILM CLUB STOOD AT HIGHEST AT AROUND 65 PARTICIPANTS, AFTER 10 YEARS SHOW AT MINOR BIT WHICH WAS 60 OBSERVED, AND SLIGHTLY INCREAMENT. AT THE END OF PERIOD IT REGAINED ITS INITIAL POSITION. NOTABLY, MARTIAL ARTS FOLLOWS A ZIG ZAG PATTERN THROUGHOUT THE PERIOD OF TWO DECADES. AMATEUR DRAMATICS WAS AN ACTIVITY WHICH DRASTICALLY DECREASED OVER THE PERIOD , IN 2000, THERE WAS ABOUT 25 INDIVIDUALS SHOWE INTEREST IN THIS ACTIVITY WHICH SLIGHLTY INCLINED AT 30 , AND AFTER THIS THE COUNTING WAS KEPT ON DECREASING , IN THE YEAR 2020 THERE WAS ONLU5 INDIVIDUALS PARTICIPATES IN THIS ACTIVITY.

PROBING FURTHER, TABLE TENNIS WAS OBSERVED A SUBSTANTIAL GROWTH OVER THE PERIOD AS IN 2000 THERE WAS APPROXIMATELY 15 INDIVIDUALS SHOW INTEREST AND IT REMAINED PLATEUD OVER 5 YEAR FROM 2005 TO 2010. INTERESTINGLY, THE MAJOR INCREAMENT WAS OBSERVED AT THE END PERIOD THE NUMBER WAS

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response covers the main features of the graph, such as the growth in table tennis and the decline in amateur dramatics. However, the response is incomplete, as it ends abruptly mid-sentence in the final paragraph. Furthermore, some data points are described vaguely, such as 'minor bit' and 'slight increament', which lacks the precision required for a Band 6 or higher. While the overview is present, the lack of a completed conclusion and the inconsistent reporting of data points mean the task is only partially addressed.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay uses basic paragraphing to separate the introduction, overview, and body paragraphs. However, the logical flow is hindered by the incomplete nature of the final paragraph. Cohesive devices are used, such as 'in general', 'in detail', and 'probing further', but they are sometimes used mechanically or inappropriately. The referencing is occasionally unclear, and the lack of a finished sentence at the end significantly disrupts the overall coherence of the response.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The range of vocabulary is limited and includes several errors in word choice and spelling, such as 'multilinear grapgh', 'increament', 'onlu5', and 'plateud'. Phrases like 'counting of participants' and 'showed in' are unnatural. While the student attempts to use some topic-specific vocabulary, the frequent errors and the reliance on basic descriptors prevent the response from reaching a higher band. The vocabulary is sufficient to convey the general meaning but lacks the precision and accuracy expected at higher levels.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response contains a mix of simple and some attempted complex structures, but these are frequently marred by grammatical errors. Examples include 'there was about 25 individuals showe interest' (subject-verb agreement and tense errors) and 'the counting was kept on decreasing'. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with unnecessary spaces before commas and periods. These errors are frequent and occasionally make the text difficult to follow, though the core meaning remains generally understandable.

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