Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-07

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 4.5)

This chart shows that how many peoples use different activities from the past some years [redacted phone].

Overall , the people changes these activities in few past years in different countries and which one is on higher or lower in this chart.

Firstly,the film club are on higher on this graph.Martial arts are in same position like the film club.Amaetur dramatics are lower in this chart.Table tennis are firstly below after some year in 2010 is on higher at the the point of 50 to 60.Musical performances are start in 2005 and end in the 2020.Table tennis and Amatuer dramatics are relevent to each other.

Secondly,some activities are same at the position and some are change.Filmclub and Musical Performances are both same activities because these are relevant to each other.People are high interested in filmclub industry annd martial arts.

In the end this graph shows the how peoples are interested in these activities in the past few years.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response attempts to address the task but fails to provide a clear or accurate summary of the data. The description of trends is confusing and often inaccurate (e.g., stating martial arts and film club are in the same position, which is not supported by the graph). There is no clear selection of main features or meaningful comparisons. The overview is vague and does not capture the significant changes over the 20-year period. The response lacks the analytical depth required for an Academic Task 1, as it focuses on subjective interpretations rather than reporting the data points provided in the graph.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.5

The response is organised into paragraphs, but the logical progression is weak. The use of cohesive devices is mechanical and often misused (e.g., 'Firstly', 'Secondly', 'In the end'). The referencing is unclear, making it difficult to follow which activity the writer is referring to at any given time. The sentences are often disjointed, and the lack of clear relationships between ideas hinders the overall flow of the report. The paragraphing is present but does not effectively group related information, leading to a fragmented structure.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.5

The vocabulary is very limited and repetitive. The writer struggles to use appropriate terminology for describing data (e.g., 'on higher', 'same position', 'lower in this chart'). There are frequent errors in word choice and spelling, such as 'peoples', 'Amaetur', 'relevent', and 'annd'. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to convey the information accurately, and the misuse of terms often obscures the intended meaning. The writer relies on basic, everyday language rather than the specific academic vocabulary required for describing trends and statistical data.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that impede communication. There is a lack of control over basic sentence structures, with many sentences being ungrammatical (e.g., 'This chart shows that how many peoples use...'). Subject-verb agreement is inconsistent, and there are significant issues with article usage and prepositional phrases. Complex structures are attempted but are almost always faulty, leading to confusion. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with missing spaces after commas and periods. The range of structures is very limited, and the high frequency of errors makes the text difficult to read.

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