Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-08
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The line graph shares information on the number of participants for various activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia throughout year 2000 to 2020.
Overall line graph depicts the different activities such as film club, martial arts, amateur dramatics, table tennis and musical performances. In film club activity number of candidate significantly higher. whereas, in amateur dramatics activity participants interest was decrease dramatically throughout year 2000 to 2020.
In other hand, people shown marginally desire in material arts activity which is around 35. However, Table tennis & musical performance candidate interest was rose continuously which is around 55 and 20 number participants.
Highest number of participants have taken part in film club throughout year 2000 to 2020 which is around 75 numbers. But in amateur dramatics activity small rise observed in between 2000 to 2005 year in graph. However, after 2005 sudden huge drop observed till 2020 at around 5 participants.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers all the activities mentioned in the graph and attempts to identify main trends. However, the analysis is somewhat superficial and lacks a clear, cohesive overview of the data. While the student identifies the highest and lowest points, the description of the trends is often disjointed and lacks precision in reporting the data points. For instance, stating 'around 55' or 'around 35' is acceptable, but the lack of clear comparison between the categories makes it difficult for the reader to grasp the overall picture. The response would benefit from a more structured approach to grouping the data, such as comparing the rising trends versus the declining ones.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organised into paragraphs, but the logical progression between them is weak. The use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate, such as 'In other hand' (instead of 'On the other hand') and 'whereas' used incorrectly at the start of a sentence. The referencing is sometimes unclear, making it difficult to follow the relationship between the different activities. While there is an attempt to use transition words, they are often misused, which disrupts the flow of the information. Improved use of linking phrases and better paragraph structure would significantly enhance the clarity of the report.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The range of vocabulary is limited and repetitive. The student relies on basic terms like 'number', 'activity', and 'interest', which restricts the ability to describe the data with precision. There are several instances of awkward word choices, such as 'marginally desire' and 'candidate interest was rose'. These errors occasionally impede the reader's understanding. To reach a higher band, the student needs to incorporate more varied vocabulary related to data trends, such as 'fluctuated', 'remained stable', 'peaked', or 'experienced a decline', and improve their control over word forms and collocations.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that affect readability. There are issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'candidate interest was rose'), missing articles (e.g., 'throughout year 2000'), and incorrect sentence structures. The student relies primarily on simple sentences, and attempts at more complex structures often result in errors. Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with the use of commas and capitalization. While the meaning is generally discernible, the high frequency of errors in basic grammar prevents the response from reaching a higher band. Focusing on sentence construction and proofreading for basic errors would be beneficial.
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