Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-08

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The line graph shows the changes in the number of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia, for the period between 2000 and 2020.

Overall, participants in every activity increased at the end of the period as compared to the beginning, but one exception was amateur dramatics, which declined over time and moved to the least participation.

Firstly, the film club participants declined from 64 in 2000 to 62 in 2005 and stood at 60 in 2010. After 2010, participation increased in the film club and jumped to 65 in 2015 and reached its highest point in 2020 with 66 contestants. Additionally, the martial arts members fell from 36 in 2000 to 31 in 2005. Moreover, after 2005, the participants rose from 31 to 38 in 2010 as compared to 35 in 2015, but at the end of the period, it stayed at the same point as at the beginning of the period.

Furthermore, the amateur dramatics category witnessed a minor increment from 27 in 2000 to 29 in 2005. After 2005, it faced a sharp decline and fell from 29 to 20 in 2010. After 2005, it moved in a downward direction and reached only 8 participants at the end of the period. In table tennis, the contestant jumped from 18 in 2000 to 20 in 2005 and remained unchanged in 2010 to stay at 20, but after 2010 it showed significant growth. After 2015 it surpassed the martial arts category and climbed to 52 at the end of the period. Finally, the musical performance category showed no participants from 200 to 2005, but after 2005, contestants reached from zero to 18 at the end of the period by surpassing the amateur category after 2015.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response covers all parts of the task and provides a clear overview of the trends. You successfully identified the main features, such as the overall growth in most categories and the decline of amateur dramatics. However, the analysis is slightly mechanical, focusing on listing data points rather than synthesising information. For example, the description of the film club and martial arts is quite repetitive. To reach a higher band, focus on grouping trends more effectively and highlighting the most significant comparisons, such as the point where table tennis overtook other activities, rather than detailing every minor fluctuation for each year.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The essay is logically organised with a clear introduction, overview, and body paragraphs. You use a range of cohesive devices such as 'Firstly', 'Additionally', 'Moreover', and 'Furthermore'. However, some of these transitions feel slightly forced or repetitive. The paragraphing is appropriate, but the internal flow within paragraphs could be improved by using more varied referencing. For instance, instead of starting multiple sentences with 'After 2005' or 'After 2010', try to integrate these time markers more fluidly into the sentence structure to improve the overall flow of the text.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You have a sufficient range of vocabulary to convey the information clearly. You use terms like 'witnessed a minor increment', 'sharp decline', and 'surpassed', which are appropriate for a task of this nature. There are some minor inaccuracies, such as using 'contestants' to refer to participants in a social centre, which is slightly unnatural in this context. Additionally, the phrase 'moved in a downward direction' is a bit wordy. Expanding your range of synonyms for 'increase' and 'decrease' and ensuring word choices are contextually precise will help you achieve a higher score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

You demonstrate a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is generally clear, there are several grammatical errors, such as 'the contestant jumped' (should be plural) and 'from 200 to 2005' (a typo for 2000). There are also some awkward phrasings like 'it stayed at the same point as at the beginning of the period'. While these errors do not impede communication, they occur frequently enough to prevent a higher band. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and refining the accuracy of your complex sentences will improve your score.

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