Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-09
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The line graph below explains the interests of people in different activities at a community centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Overall, farmclub remained undisputed winner for about two decades. Followed by table tennis whereas, the musical performance being low at first gained some rise but amateur dramatics was the lowest in the end.
From 2000's till the period of 2020 the farmclub remains at the top of the graph with most participants and averages at about 65 participants. Amateur dramatics and martial arts were almost same in the start but martial remains steady with minimal fluctuations but dramatics faced a major decline after 2005 which kept declining till 2020. Table tennis was the lowest in number till 2000's but after 2010 it gained massive popularity after 2010 and tripled it's partcipants till 2020. Musical performance was non existant till 2005 but after that year it started to rise and kept risng till 2020 and slowly gained about 20 attendies.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers all key features of the graph, including the trends for the farmclub, table tennis, and other activities. You successfully identified the main trends and made relevant comparisons, such as noting the decline in amateur dramatics and the rise in table tennis. However, the report lacks precision in data reporting; for instance, you mention 'averages at about 65 participants' without clearly referencing the specific start and end points or the fluctuations shown in the graph. To improve, ensure that you provide more specific data points from the axes to support your descriptions, rather than relying on general observations. The overview is present but could be more clearly integrated to highlight the most significant trends.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The response is logically organized into an introduction, an overview, and body paragraphs. You use some cohesive devices, such as 'Overall' and 'From 2000's till the period of 2020', to guide the reader. However, the flow between sentences is sometimes mechanical, and the use of linking words could be more varied. For example, the transition between the overview and the body paragraphs is abrupt. Additionally, some referencing is slightly unclear, such as 'martial remains steady', where the subject could be more explicitly stated. Improving the use of cohesive devices and ensuring smoother transitions between ideas would enhance the overall coherence of the report.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'undisputed winner', 'fluctuations', and 'massive popularity'. However, there are several spelling and word-choice errors, such as 'non existant' (non-existent), 'attendies' (attendees), and 'partcipants' (participants). These errors do not impede communication but indicate a need for more careful proofreading. To reach a higher band, try to incorporate more precise academic vocabulary and ensure correct spelling of key terms related to data description. The range is sufficient to convey the main points, but the lack of precision in word choice limits the score.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is generally clear, there are frequent grammatical errors, such as '2000's till the period of 2020' (the apostrophe is unnecessary here), 'it's partcipants' (should be 'its'), and 'martial remains steady' (should be 'martial arts'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with comma usage. While you attempt complex sentences, they are often marred by these minor errors. To improve, focus on subject-verb agreement and the correct use of possessive pronouns. Increasing the accuracy of your sentence construction will help you achieve a higher band score.
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