Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-10
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
the assigned line graph delineates information regarding that the numbers of participants for different activities at one social center in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020. data has been calibrated in number of participants.
overall, It is evident that the film club is consistently the most popular activity throughout the entire period. Table tennis and musical performance experienced upward trend in participation, with table tennis showing the most dramatic increase.
In, 2000 the film club stared with highest attendance at approximately 65 participants. despite a slight dip to the around 60 in 2010. it recovered to end at roughly 65 members by 2020. martial art began as the second most popular activity with around 36 participants.
table tennis participation stayed flat at around 18 to 20 people during the first decade. musical performance has zero participation until 2005. amateur dramatics started has 25 participation in 2000 but consistent downward trajectory.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers the main features of the graph, identifying the film club as the most popular activity and noting the trends for other categories. However, the analysis is somewhat incomplete; for instance, the description of martial arts is cut off, and the data for amateur dramatics is not fully explained. The overview is present but could be more comprehensive by highlighting the most significant changes more clearly. While the key trends are identified, the lack of detail regarding the final years for some activities limits the overall development of the response. To improve, ensure all categories are fully described with clear comparisons.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the flow is hindered by mechanical errors and awkward transitions. The use of cohesive devices is limited, and some sentences feel disjointed, such as the abrupt transition between the overview and the body paragraphs. Referencing is occasionally unclear, and the paragraphing is somewhat inconsistent. While there is a logical attempt to group information, the lack of smooth linking words makes the progression of ideas feel mechanical. Improving the use of transition signals like 'in contrast' or 'subsequently' would help the reader follow the information more effectively.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks the precision and variety required for a higher band. There are several instances of awkward phrasing, such as 'stared with highest attendance' and 'consistent downward trajectory' (which lacks a verb). The range of vocabulary is limited, relying on basic descriptors. While the meaning is generally clear, the lack of sophisticated collocations and occasional word-choice errors (e.g., 'data has been calibrated in number of participants') suggest a need for more varied and accurate lexical items to describe trends and data points.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains a mix of simple and some attempted complex structures, but there are frequent errors in grammar and punctuation that occasionally impede readability. Issues include missing articles ('in 2000 the film club'), incorrect verb forms ('stared' instead of 'started'), and punctuation errors (e.g., 'In, 2000'). Sentence boundaries are sometimes unclear, and there are errors in subject-verb agreement. While the meaning is usually understandable, the frequency of these errors prevents the writing from reaching a higher band. Focusing on basic sentence construction and proofreading for articles and verb tenses would be beneficial.
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