Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-11
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 6.0)
The line graph illustrates the change in number of participants for various activities including, film club, martial arts, amateur dramatics, table tennis and musical performances, at single social center in Melbourne, Australia for the time period of 20 years ([redacted phone]).
Overall, all activities have experienced fluctuation in number of participants from 2000 to 2020. Table tennis shows the sharp surge, whereas amateur dramatics experiences a noticeable drop. However, film club remains consistent for about 20 years.
The film club have the most number of participants (65) in 2020, then observes a mild drop to 63 and 62 attendees level in 2005 and 2010 respectively, followed by marginal rise to 65 again in 2020. Conversely, amateur dramatics observe a fractional increase in 2005 (26) before facing a gradual decline in level of participants from 2005 to 2020.
Additionally, the martial arts activity maintains the occupants level for 20 years despite observing minimal ups and downs, while table tennis sport gains the members' attention dramatically from 2010 to 2020. Furthermore, Musical performances become successful in gradually increasing participation from 0 in 2005 to approximately 14 in 2020.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
The response covers all key features of the graph, including the overall trends and specific data points for the various activities. You successfully identified the main trends, such as the sharp surge in table tennis and the decline in amateur dramatics. However, the description of the film club data is slightly confusing; you mention it has 65 participants in 2020, then a drop, then a rise back to 65, which is difficult to follow without clearer chronological sequencing. To reach a higher band, ensure that data points are presented with greater precision and that comparisons between categories are more explicitly linked to the timeline provided.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The essay is logically organized into an introduction, an overview, and two body paragraphs. The use of cohesive devices such as 'Overall', 'Conversely', and 'Additionally' helps guide the reader through the information. However, some transitions feel slightly mechanical, and the internal cohesion within the third paragraph is hampered by the confusing sequence of the film club data. The paragraphing is appropriate, but the flow between sentences could be improved by using more varied linking phrases to connect the trends of different activities rather than listing them one by one.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'fluctuation', 'sharp surge', 'marginal rise', and 'gradual decline'. There are some minor inaccuracies in word choice, such as 'occupants level' (which is not appropriate for activity participants) and 'most number of participants' (which should be 'highest number'). While the vocabulary is sufficient to convey the meaning, it lacks the sophistication and precision required for higher bands. Expanding your repertoire of reporting verbs and collocations related to data trends would enhance your score.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are several grammatical errors, such as 'The film club have' (subject-verb agreement), 'at single social center' (missing article), and 'table tennis sport' (redundant). Additionally, the phrasing 'observes a mild drop to 63 and 62 attendees level' is somewhat awkward. While these errors do not impede communication, they occur frequently enough to prevent a higher score. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and the correct use of articles would significantly improve the accuracy of your writing.
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