Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-11

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The graph illustrates information on the number of participants for various activities, namely Film club, Martial arts, Amateur dramatics, Table tennis, and Musical performances at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia, for the period 2000 to 2020.

Overall, it is evident that the number of participants in table tennis and musical performances experienced an upward trend, while number of participants in Amateur dramatics experienced a downward trend. In addition, the number of participants in film club remained relatively stable and for Martial arts fluctuated trend throughtout the period.

Overall, it is clear that the number of participants in table tennis was nearly 16 in 2000 which increased to 20 in 2005 and remained same till 2010, after that it showed a sharp surge to approximately 36 in 2015 and reached 52 in 2020. The number of participants in musical performances was 0 in 2000 and 2005, after that it increased to 10 in 2010, then grew slightly to 15 and remained almost same in the end of period.

In 2000 and 2005, the number of participants in Amateur dramatics was 26 and then It declined sharply through out the period and decreased to 5 in 2020. The number of participants in martial arts was almost 47 in 2000, then decreased to nearly 31 in 2005 and then reached approximately 46 in the end. Then, the number of participants in film club was 65 in 2000 and then approximately remained the same till 2010, and then rose slightly in 2015 and 2020.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

The response covers all key features of the graph and provides a clear overview of the trends. You successfully identified the main upward, downward, and fluctuating patterns. However, the report could be improved by grouping the data more effectively. For instance, instead of listing every category in a separate paragraph, you could group activities by their performance (e.g., those that increased versus those that decreased). Additionally, while you provided specific figures, the comparison between categories could be more analytical rather than just listing numbers. Overall, the task is well-addressed with a clear summary of the main trends.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is logically organized with a clear introduction, overview, and body paragraphs. You use some cohesive devices such as 'In addition' and 'Overall', which help the flow. However, the transition between the overview and the body paragraphs is slightly repetitive, as you use 'Overall' twice. The progression of ideas is generally clear, but the paragraphing could be more balanced. Some sentences are a bit mechanical in their structure, and using a wider variety of linking words would improve the cohesion of the response.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'upward trend', 'downward trend', 'sharp surge', and 'fluctuated'. There are some minor issues with word choice and collocation, such as 'fluctuated trend' (should be 'fluctuated throughout') and 'remained same' (should be 'remained the same'). While the vocabulary is sufficient to convey the information clearly, it lacks the sophistication and precision required for a higher band score. Expanding your repertoire of descriptive verbs and adverbs would enhance the quality of your report.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is generally clear, there are several grammatical errors, such as missing articles ('the number of participants in film club' should be 'the film club') and minor punctuation issues. Some sentences are slightly clunky, such as 'remained almost same in the end of period'. Despite these errors, they do not impede communication. To improve, focus on article usage and ensuring consistent verb tenses when describing past data.

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