Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-11
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The line graph illustrates the information on the number of participants involve in different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia in between 2000 to 2020.
overall, one of the highest participants involved in the film club activity over a period of time.Table tennis and Amateur dramatics activity done by them intercept in 2010 while others involved in musical performance started in the 2005.
In 2000 above the 60 participants done the film club activity after that it slightly decreased in 2010 and finally reached just below 70 in 2020.Above the 30 participants involved in the Martial arts, after following two years it marked just below the 30 numbers and further declined in next two tears.Other two activities Amateur dramatics and Table tennis done by them started in 2000 in order to below 30 and 20 numbers.In 2010 both intercept at 20 numbers after it first sudden rose and reached at above the 50 numbers while oherr decreased and marked at below the 10 numbers in 2020.
Last activity done by the participants that started with 0 numbers in 2005 and then it climbed up above the 10 numbers in following three years.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers all parts of the task and identifies key trends, such as the film club's popularity and the intersection of amateur dramatics and table tennis. However, the reporting of data is often imprecise (e.g., 'above the 60', 'just below 30') and the description of trends is sometimes confusing, such as the mention of 'next two tears' (likely years) and the unclear description of the musical performance activity. While the main features are highlighted, the lack of clarity in data reporting and the somewhat disorganized presentation of the trends prevent this from reaching a higher band.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The response is organized into paragraphs, but the flow of ideas is frequently interrupted by awkward phrasing and unclear referencing. The use of cohesive devices is mechanical and sometimes inaccurate, such as the abrupt transition 'after following two years' and the confusing use of 'while oherr decreased'. The logical progression is hindered by these issues, making it difficult for the reader to follow the comparison of the different activities smoothly. Improved use of linking words and clearer sentence structures would significantly enhance the coherence of the report.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and repetitive, relying on basic structures to describe the data. There are several instances of word-choice errors and awkward collocations, such as 'participants involve' instead of 'participants involved', 'activity done by them' instead of 'participation in activities', and 'intercept' used incorrectly to describe lines crossing on a graph. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to convey the information with precision, and the errors occasionally cause the reader to pause to interpret the intended meaning.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains a mix of simple and some attempted complex structures, but these are frequently marred by grammatical errors. There are consistent issues with verb tense, subject-verb agreement, and preposition usage (e.g., 'in between 2000 to 2020', 'participants done the film club activity'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, and the sentence construction is often fragmented or run-on. While the meaning is generally discernible, the high frequency of errors in basic grammar significantly impacts the overall quality of the writing.
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