Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-11
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The illustration shows information numbers of participants by activity at social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020. Overall, in film club task had the highest number of contestant throughout the period.
It is quite evident from line chart that, film club activity had the highest number of participants all over the period. In contrast, amateur dramatics had the lowest figure of participants by 2020. As compared to amateur dramatics, the trend of participants rose dramatically in table tennis play from 2010 to 2020. It is noticed that in 2010, table tennis and amateur dramatics had the same number of competitors which is approximately 20, also in 2015 table tennis and martial arts had the equal figure of participants which is around 38.
Furthermore, participants in martial arts activity fluctuated all over the period. Moreover, players of musical performances were not interested at all in 2005, after that they showed high participation in this play from 2010 to 2020.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers the main features of the graph, such as the dominance of the film club and the trends in table tennis and martial arts. However, the overview is somewhat limited and lacks a clear synthesis of the data. While the key trends are identified, the reporting of specific figures is occasionally imprecise or repetitive. To improve, ensure that the overview highlights the most significant trends across the entire period rather than just focusing on one activity. Additionally, ensure that all data points mentioned are clearly supported by the graph to avoid potential inaccuracies in reporting.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a concluding summary. Cohesive devices such as 'In contrast', 'Furthermore', and 'Moreover' are used to link ideas, although some transitions feel slightly mechanical. The progression of ideas is generally clear, but the connection between sentences could be smoother to enhance the flow. The use of referencing is mostly effective, though the structure of the sentences occasionally makes the relationship between the data points feel disjointed. Overall, the information is presented in a coherent manner.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is adequate for the task, allowing the writer to describe trends and comparisons. However, there is a reliance on basic terminology such as 'number of participants' and 'highest number'. The use of 'contestant' and 'play' is slightly unnatural in the context of a social centre. To reach a higher band, incorporate more precise academic vocabulary related to data description, such as 'participation rates', 'fluctuated significantly', or 'witnessed a sharp increase'. Some word choices are repetitive, which limits the range of expression.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are several grammatical errors, such as missing articles ('at social centre', 'in line chart') and awkward phrasing ('information numbers of participants'). While these errors do not impede communication, they occur frequently enough to prevent a higher score. The sentence structure is generally functional, but the control over complex sentences is inconsistent. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and the correct use of articles will significantly improve the accuracy of the writing.
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