Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-11
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The line graph evidently presents the information that number of participants involved in various activities conducted at social center at Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020. Some of activities remained unchanged, while some seen decline and some of other seen increments. Activities in film club remained same throughout the comparison and amature dramas had seen a great decline. From 2000, number of participants involving film club remained still until 2020 with approximately 65 participants. While, musical performances rose from 2005 and reached to almost 20 members in 2022. While amature dramas had seen a great decline from 2005 and there are almost 5 participants in 2022. However, table tennis got a great acceptance from 2010, in 2022 it reached to 55 participants. Nevertheless, martial arts shown some small ups and downs but remained almost the same throughout the period. However, film clubs seen constant acceptance till the year 2022.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response covers the main features of the graph, such as the stability of film clubs and the decline in amateur drama. However, the data reporting is inconsistent and inaccurate. For instance, you mention 2022, but the graph only covers the period up to 2020. Additionally, the figures cited (e.g., 65 participants for film clubs) are not clearly supported by the visual data provided. While you attempt to identify trends, the lack of precision in data interpretation and the inclusion of data points outside the specified timeframe (2022) prevent a higher score. To improve, ensure all data points are accurately extracted and strictly adhere to the timeframe provided in the prompt.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay lacks a clear structure, consisting of a single paragraph that jumps between different activities without a logical flow. While you use some cohesive devices like 'However' and 'Nevertheless', they are often used incorrectly or repetitively, which makes the progression of ideas feel mechanical. There is no clear introduction or overview, which is essential for a Band 6 or higher. To improve, organize your response into distinct paragraphs: an introduction, an overview of the main trends, and two body paragraphs grouping the activities by their performance (e.g., increasing vs. decreasing trends).
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is somewhat limited and repetitive. You frequently use basic phrases like 'seen a great decline' or 'remained the same'. There are also issues with word choice and spelling, such as 'amature' (amateur) and 'center' (centre). While the meaning is generally clear, the range of vocabulary is not sufficient to demonstrate flexibility or precision. To reach a higher band, try to incorporate more varied verbs and adverbs to describe trends, such as 'fluctuated', 'remained stable', or 'experienced a significant drop', and ensure correct spelling of key terms.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. There are missing articles (e.g., 'number of participants', 'at social center'), incorrect verb tenses (e.g., 'some seen decline'), and awkward sentence structures. The range of grammatical structures is limited, relying mostly on simple sentences. There is a lack of control over complex sentences, and punctuation is inconsistent. To improve, focus on mastering basic subject-verb agreement, the correct use of articles, and ensuring that your verb tenses consistently reflect the past time period of the graph.
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