Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-11
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The illustration shows activity of different number of participants for different activities in Australia's Malbourne city for the period of 2000 to 2020. Overall, all activities started from by year 2000 expect the musical performances. There was two dramatically increased and decreased in such table like Amateur dramatics and Table tennis.
It is quit evident from the chart all activities started from by year 2000 expect Musical performances. And the musical performance increase sharply by year 2010 then, rises slowly . Another performance like Table tennis rised in consistent way by the year 2010 then increase sharply and the number of participants reached from 18 to 52. Thus they showed dramtical chages in graph.
Furthermore, Amateur dramatics by the start number of participants are larged then start decreasing with the passage of time showed lowest participants at the end in year 2020 . Martial arts activity participant decrease and increased in a small way . At the end the Film club in such case more number of participants take part and remained almost the same with the passage of time with little changed.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response provides an overview and attempts to report on the main features of the graph. However, the analysis is often inaccurate or confusing. For example, the statement that 'all activities started from by year 2000 expect the musical performances' is unclear, and the description of trends is inconsistent with the visual data. The report lacks a clear, logical selection of data points, and some descriptions, such as the claim that Amateur dramatics showed the 'lowest participants at the end', are not supported by the provided graph. The response addresses the task requirements but fails to provide a clear, accurate summary of the trends, leading to a limited development of the main features.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organised into paragraphs, but the progression of ideas is often disjointed. While there are some attempts at cohesive devices like 'Furthermore' and 'Overall', the use of these is often mechanical or misused. Referencing is frequently unclear, such as in the phrase 'in such case more number of participants take part', which makes it difficult for the reader to follow the intended meaning. The logical flow between sentences is weak, and the lack of clear signposting makes the overall structure feel somewhat fragmented.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The range of vocabulary is limited and often repetitive. There are frequent errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'rised in consistent way', 'larged', and 'dramtical chages'. These errors occasionally impede the reader's understanding of the data. The student relies on basic vocabulary and struggles to use precise terminology to describe trends (e.g., 'increase sharply' is used, but the surrounding context is often grammatically incorrect or imprecise). To improve, the student should focus on learning specific collocations for describing graphs, such as 'a steady increase' or 'a significant decline'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains a high frequency of grammatical errors, including issues with verb tenses ('rised', 'showed'), article usage, and sentence structure. Many sentences are poorly constructed, such as 'There was two dramatically increased and decreased in such table', which lacks clarity and correct subject-verb agreement. While there is an attempt to use complex structures, they are often faulty and cause difficulty for the reader. Punctuation is also inconsistent. The student needs to focus on basic sentence construction and ensure that subject-verb agreement and tense consistency are maintained throughout the report.
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