Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-11

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Some of interesting information regarding the participation in different co-curricular activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia during [redacted phone] is displayed in the plot.

Overall, it can be observed that mostly people were interested in taking part in Film club whereas participation in Amateur dramatics significantly dropped during this duration. Moreover, important feature was seen in peoples interest in playing Table tennis which climbed to its highest point by the end of 2020 year.

Beginning with the first half of line chart, it can be observed that during 2000-10, athletes ratio remained constant during this duration. Subsequently, Musical performances rose sharply between year 2005 to 2010. On contrast, Amateur dramatics participation dramatically decreased from almost 27 to approximately 20 by the end of year of 2010. Furthermore, ratio of people keen to learn Martial art showed a little change but became constant later on.

Moving to the second half of the graph, the worth noting trend was displayed by the sportsmen taking Table tennis as a sport which was rapidly increased from 20 percent to 50 percent. Furthermore, dramatics kept on losing the proportion shockingly hit a low of 5 percent. On the other hand, Film industry became almost constant during this duration. However, the music industry kept on increasing gradually.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response provides a clear overview of the main trends, such as the rise in Table Tennis and the decline in Amateur Dramatics. However, the report suffers from inaccuracies in data interpretation. For instance, the text mentions 'athletes ratio' and 'Film industry' when the graph refers to participation in specific activities. Furthermore, the data points are occasionally imprecise, such as describing the rise in Table Tennis as '20 percent to 50 percent' without clear evidence of these specific units. While the main features are identified, the lack of precision in reporting the data and the misidentification of categories (e.g., calling activities 'industries') prevents a higher score.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is logically organized into paragraphs, with a clear introduction, overview, and body paragraphs focusing on different time periods. Cohesive devices such as 'Beginning with', 'Subsequently', 'On contrast', and 'Moving to' are used to guide the reader. However, some transitions are slightly mechanical or misused, such as 'On contrast' (should be 'In contrast') and 'the worth noting trend'. Paragraphing is used effectively to separate the two halves of the timeline, which helps the reader follow the progression of the data. Overall, the organization is coherent, though the flow is occasionally interrupted by awkward phrasing.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The range of vocabulary is adequate for the task, with attempts to use descriptive language like 'climbed to its highest point' and 'rose sharply'. However, there are noticeable word-choice errors that affect precision. Referring to club activities as 'industries' (e.g., 'Film industry', 'music industry') is inaccurate. Additionally, terms like 'athletes ratio' are used incorrectly in the context of a social centre. While the vocabulary is sufficient to convey the main ideas, the lack of precision and occasional misuse of terminology limit the score to the 6.0 band.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The response uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are several grammatical errors, such as 'mostly people were interested' (should be 'most people'), 'by the end of 2020 year' (should be 'by the end of 2020'), and 'the worth noting trend was displayed' (awkward phrasing). Punctuation is generally acceptable, but there are minor errors in article usage and prepositional phrases. While these errors do not impede communication, they occur frequently enough to prevent the response from reaching the 7.0 band, which requires more frequent error-free sentences.

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