Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-11

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The provided graph illustrates information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social center in Melbourne , Australia between the 2000 and 2020.

overall it can be observed at glance that contributors of film club in 2000 a year decline slightly in 2010 but again rise for 65 in 2020. It can also be seen that members of Amateur dramatics dropped in 2020. whereas table tennis contestants rose from 25 to 50 in the figure in 2020.

More in depth it can be seen that participants of film club have marginally decreased to 60 but then gradually increase in 2020 to 65. Moreover martial arts members slightly decrease to 30 but then increase at same it start first 40 in the figure. Amateur dramatics contestants first have dropped to 5 in 2020. Further examination shows that table tennis participants increased and overtake the Amateur dramatics and Martial arts members. It can be observed that Musical performance members quantity is 0 in 2005 and then rose to 25 .

In conclusion , it can be seen that Australlians are more interested in film club and less interested in amateur dramatics.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response provides a summary of the main features, but the reporting is inconsistent and contains factual inaccuracies. For example, you state that amateur dramatics dropped to 5 in 2020, but the graph shows a different trend. The overview is present but lacks clarity, and the data selection is somewhat disjointed. To improve, ensure you accurately interpret the data points and group them logically (e.g., by comparing trends rather than listing individual fluctuations). The response covers all categories, but the lack of precision in reporting the figures prevents it from reaching a higher band.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is organised into paragraphs, which is a positive step. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate, such as 'More in depth it can be seen' and 'Further examination shows'. The logical progression between sentences is sometimes hindered by awkward phrasing, making the flow feel disjointed. While the overall structure is clear, the internal cohesion needs more variety and better control to guide the reader through the data comparisons more effectively.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, but it is limited and repetitive. You rely on basic verbs like 'rise', 'drop', and 'increase'. There are also some errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'contributors of film club' (should be 'participants') and 'members quantity is 0'. To reach a higher band, you should incorporate more precise vocabulary for describing trends, such as 'fluctuated', 'peaked', or 'remained stable', and ensure that nouns and verbs are used in their correct collocations.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Issues include incorrect preposition usage ('rise for 65'), missing articles ('in 2000 a year'), and tense inconsistencies. Punctuation is also problematic, with unnecessary spaces before commas and inconsistent capitalisation. While the meaning is generally understandable, the frequency of these errors indicates a lack of control over complex structures, which limits the score.

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