Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-11
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The provided graph illustrates information on numbers of participants for different activities at a social center in Melbourne , Australia between the 2000 and 2020.
overall, it can be observed at a glance that participants of film club in 2000 a year declined slightly in 2010 but again rose for 65 in 2020. It can also be seen that members of Amateur dramatics dropped in 2020. whereas table tennis contestants rose from 25 to 50 in the figure in 2020.
More in depth it can be seen that participants of film club have marginally decreased to 60 but then increased in 2020 to 65. Moreover martial arts members slightly decreased to 30 but then increased at same it start first 40 in the figure. Amateur dramatics contestants first have dropped to 5 in 2020. Further examination shows that table tennis participants increased and overtook the Amateur dramatics and Martial arts members. It can be observed that Musical performance members quantity is 0 in 2005 and then rose to 25 .
In conclusion , it can be seen that Australians are more interested in film club and less interested in amateur dramatics.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response covers the main features of the graph, but the reporting is inconsistent and contains factual inaccuracies. For example, you state that amateur dramatics dropped to 5 in 2020, but the graph shows a different trend. Additionally, the description of the musical performance starting at 0 in 2005 is not clearly supported by the data provided. While you attempt to make comparisons, such as noting that table tennis overtook other activities, the lack of precision in data reporting hinders the overall clarity. To improve, ensure that every figure cited matches the graph exactly and focus on grouping data logically rather than listing individual fluctuations.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organised into paragraphs, but the logical flow is disrupted by repetitive phrasing and awkward transitions. Phrases like 'More in depth it can be seen' and 'Further examination shows' are used, but the connection between sentences is often mechanical. The referencing is sometimes unclear, such as 'increased at same it start first 40', which makes the progression of ideas difficult to follow. Paragraphing is present, but the internal structure of the paragraphs lacks the cohesion required for a higher band. Using a wider variety of linking words and ensuring clear pronoun referencing would significantly improve the readability of your report.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is somewhat limited and repetitive, relying heavily on basic verbs like 'increased', 'decreased', and 'rose'. There are also issues with word choice and collocation, such as 'participants of film club' (should be 'participants in the film club') and 'members quantity is 0'. The expression 'at same it start first 40' is unclear and indicates a struggle to express data trends accurately. To reach a higher band, you should incorporate more precise terminology for describing trends, such as 'fluctuated', 'peaked', or 'remained stable', and work on using more natural collocations when discussing group participation.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede communication. Issues include missing articles ('at a social center'), incorrect prepositions ('participants of'), and awkward sentence construction ('participants of film club in 2000 a year declined'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with the use of commas and capitalization. While the meaning is generally understandable, the high frequency of errors in basic grammar and sentence structure prevents the response from reaching a higher band. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and correct article usage will help improve your accuracy.
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