Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-11
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The provided graph illustrates information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social center in Melbourne , Australia between the 2000 and 2020.
overall it can be observed at a glance that contributors of film club in 2000 a year declined slightly in 2010 but again rise for 65 in 2020. It can also be seen that members of Amateur dramatics dropped in 2020. whereas table tennis contestants rose from 25 to 50 in the figure in 2020.
More in depth it can be seen that participants of film club have marginally decreased to 60 but then increased in 2020 to 65. Moreover martial arts members slightly decreased to 30 but then increased at same it start first 40 in the figure. Amateur dramatics contestants first have dropped to 5 in 2020. Further examination shows that table tennis participants increased and overtook the Amateur dramatics and Martial arts members. It can be observed that Musical performance members quantity is 0 in 2005 and then rose to 25 .
In conclusion , it can be seen that Australians are more interested in film club and less interested in amateur dramatics.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response covers the main features of the graph, but the analysis is inconsistent and occasionally inaccurate. For instance, the description of the film club's trend is repetitive and confusing, and the claim that musical performance was 0 in 2005 is not supported by the provided data. While you identify some trends, the lack of precision in reporting figures and the failure to clearly compare the activities throughout the period limit the score. To improve, ensure that every data point mentioned is accurate and that you group information logically to highlight key trends rather than listing individual changes in a disjointed manner.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organised into paragraphs, but the progression of ideas is often unclear. The use of cohesive devices is mechanical and sometimes inappropriate, such as the transition 'More in depth it can be seen that', which does not flow naturally from the previous paragraph. Referencing is also problematic; for example, the phrase 'at same it start first 40' is difficult to follow. Paragraphing is present, but the internal structure of the paragraphs lacks logical flow, making it difficult for the reader to follow the comparison of the different activities over the twenty-year period.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The range of vocabulary is limited and repetitive. You frequently use basic terms like 'increased', 'decreased', and 'rose'. There are also issues with word choice and collocation, such as 'contributors of film club' instead of 'participants' and 'contestants' used for table tennis, which is not the most natural term in this context. Some phrasing is awkward, such as 'in the figure in 2020'. To reach a higher band, you should aim to use a wider variety of verbs and nouns to describe trends, such as 'fluctuated', 'peaked', or 'remained stable', and ensure your collocations are more precise.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Common issues include incorrect verb tenses ('again rise for 65'), missing articles, and awkward sentence construction ('participants of film club have marginally decreased to 60 but then increased in 2020 to 65'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with the use of commas and capitalization. While the meaning is generally understandable, the high frequency of errors in basic grammar and sentence structure prevents the response from reaching a higher band.
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