Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-11
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The provided graph illustrates information on the number of participants for different activities at a social center in Melbourne , Australia between the 2000 and 2020.
overall, it can be observed at a glance that contributors of film club in 2000 which declined slightly in 2010 but again rose of 65 in 2020. It can also be seen that members of Amateur dramatics dropped in 2020. whereas table tennis contestants rose from 25 to 50 in the figure in 2020.
More in depth it can be seen that participants of film club have marginally decreased to 60 but then increased in 2020 to 65. Moreover martial arts members slightly decreased to 30 but then increased at same it start first 40 in the figure. Amateur dramatics contestants first have dropped to 5 in 2020. Further examination shows that table tennis participants increased and overtook the Amateur dramatics and Martial arts members. It can be observed that Musical performance members quantity is 0 in 2005 and then rose to 25 .
In conclusion , it can be seen that Australians are more interested in film club and less interested in amateur dramatics.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers the main features of the graph, but the presentation is inconsistent and lacks clarity. While you identify some trends, the description of the data is often confusing or inaccurate, such as stating that 'Musical performance members quantity is 0 in 2005' when the graph shows a different starting point. The overview is present but lacks a clear summary of the most significant trends, such as the overall growth of table tennis compared to the decline in amateur dramatics. To improve, ensure that you accurately transcribe data points and focus on clear, comparative statements rather than listing individual fluctuations.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organised into paragraphs, which is a positive step. However, the logical progression is frequently interrupted by awkward phrasing and unclear referencing. For example, the transition 'More in depth it can be seen' is clunky, and the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or misused. The connection between sentences is sometimes weak, making it difficult for the reader to follow the comparison of trends over time. Improving the use of linking words such as 'consequently', 'in contrast', or 'meanwhile' would help create a smoother flow between your observations.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary range is limited and often repetitive. You rely on basic terms like 'increased' and 'decreased' throughout the text. There are also issues with word choice and collocation, such as 'contributors of film club' (should be 'participants') and 'members quantity' (should be 'number of members'). Some phrasing is unnatural, which hinders the precision of your report. To reach a higher band, try to incorporate a wider variety of verbs and nouns related to data description, such as 'fluctuated', 'peaked', 'remained stable', or 'a significant rise'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the response, including issues with subject-verb agreement, article usage, and sentence structure. For instance, 'contributors of film club in 2000 which declined' is a sentence fragment. You also struggle with prepositions and tense consistency, such as 'rose of 65' instead of 'rose to 65'. While you attempt some complex structures, they are often faulty, which can cause confusion for the reader. Focusing on basic sentence accuracy and ensuring that every sentence has a clear subject and verb will significantly improve your score.
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