Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-11
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The provided graph illustrates information on the number of participants for different activities at a social center in Melbourne; Australia between the 2000 and 2020.
Overall, it can be observed at a glance that contributors of film club in 2000 was 65. It can also be seen that members of Amateur dramatics dropped in 2020. Whereas table tennis contestants rose from 25 to 50 in the figure in 2020.
More in depth it can be seen that participants of film club have marginally decreased to 60 but then increased in 2020 to 65. Moreover martial arts members slightly decreased to 30 but then increased at same it start first 40 in the figure. Amateur dramatics contestants first have dropped to 5 in 2020. Further examination shows that table tennis participants increased and overtook the Amateur dramatics and Martial arts members. It can be observed that Musical performance members quantity is 0 in 2005 and then rose to 25 .
In conclusion , it can be seen that Australians are more interested in film club and less interested in amateur dramatics.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response covers the main features of the graph, but the presentation of data is often inaccurate or confusing. For instance, stating that 'Musical performance members quantity is 0 in 2005' is a specific detail, but the overall summary lacks a clear, analytical overview of the trends. The description of the data is frequently disjointed, and the comparisons between activities are not always logical. To improve, focus on grouping the data by trends (e.g., activities that increased versus those that declined) rather than listing individual data points in a way that obscures the overall picture.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organised into paragraphs, but the progression of ideas is often unclear. While some cohesive devices are used, such as 'Moreover' and 'In conclusion', they are sometimes applied mechanically or inappropriately. The referencing is occasionally confusing, making it difficult for the reader to follow the comparison between the different activities. The logical flow is hindered by sentences that do not connect well to the previous ones, leading to a somewhat fragmented reading experience. Improving the use of linking words and ensuring each paragraph has a clear thematic focus would enhance coherence.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks precision and variety. There is a reliance on basic terms like 'increased', 'decreased', and 'rose'. Some word choices are awkward or incorrect, such as 'contributors of film club' (should be 'participants') and 'members quantity'. There are also issues with collocation, such as 'at same it start first 40'. To reach a higher band, you should incorporate more varied and precise vocabulary related to data description, such as 'fluctuated', 'peaked', 'remained stable', or 'experienced a downward trend'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Examples include 'between the 2000 and 2020' (incorrect article usage), 'contributors... was 65' (subject-verb agreement error), and 'Amateur dramatics contestants first have dropped' (incorrect tense). Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with the use of commas and spacing. While the meaning is generally understandable, the high frequency of errors in basic grammar and sentence construction prevents the writing from reaching a higher band score.
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