Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-12

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The line graph gives information o the number of participants in various activities on social center involves in Melbourne, Australia period from 2000 to 2020, however it involves five major stages such as Film club, Martial arts, Amateur dramatics, Table tennis and Musical performances.

the participants active in mostly Film club it was rise, to 70%, and Amateur dramatics, Table tennis both are equal in 2010, 20%, in the period of 2015 table tennis and martial arts 35%, Musical performances and Amateur dramatics same period in 2015 about 16%.

the Amateur dramatics was fall to 5% in 2020, remaining four stages are surge to nearly 56,36,5,15, in the four stages the Number of participants are active in the period of 2000 to 2020, which involves at one social center in Melbourne, Australia.

the people participants from 0 to 65 propotion and the film club starts from 65 to 70 it was growth in 5% all the four stages growth nearly 10 to 15, Nevertheless Amateur dramatics was drop.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response attempts to cover the main features of the line graph showing participant numbers from 2000 to 2020 at a social centre in Melbourne, Australia. While the writer identifies several data points and trends—such as the rise in film club participation and the drop in amateur dramatics—the overview is confused and lacks clarity. The introduction is poorly phrased, and the reporting of specific figures (percentages) is often inaccurate or poorly contextualised. The overall response covers some parts of the task, but the lack of a clear summary of overall trends limits the task achievement to a Band 5.0.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is divided into four paragraphs, which visually resembles a standard IELTS structure. However, the logical progression within and between paragraphs is weak. The use of cohesive devices is minimal and often inaccurate (e.g., 'however it involves', 'the participants active in mostly', 'remaining four stages are surge'). There are no clear linking phrases to guide the reader through the data comparisons. Paragraphing is present, but internal cohesion is faulty and mechanical. This places the response in the Band 5.0 category for Coherence and Cohesion.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary used is very basic and repetitive. The writer relies heavily on simple terms like 'rise', 'fall', and 'growth', and often misuses words, such as 'stages' instead of activities, or 'propotion'. There are frequent lexical inaccuracies, for instance, 'participants active in mostly film club it was rise' and 'surge to nearly 56,36,5,15'. The range of vocabulary is limited and minimally adequate for conveying basic numbers, but word choice errors and awkward collocations cause difficulty for the reader, aligning with Band 5.0.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5

The grammatical structure of the essay is heavily flawed. There is a complete absence of error-free complex sentences, and many sentences are grammatically incomplete or run-on fragments (e.g., 'the participants active in mostly Film club it was rise, to 70%, and Amateur dramatics, Table tennis both are equal in 2010, 20%'). Punctuation is used incorrectly, with random capitalization and comma splices. Errors in tense, subject-verb agreement, and clause structure are frequent and occasionally obscure the intended meaning, earning a Band 4.5.

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