Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-12
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
THE GRAPH ILLUSTRATES THAT THE NUMBER OF PARTICIPANTS FOR DIFFERENT ACTIVITIES AT ONE SOCIAL CENTRE IN MELBOURNE, AUSTRALIA FOR THE PERIOD 2000 TO 2020.
OVERALL, THE FILM CLUB WAS THE MOST POPULAR ACTIVITY THROUGHOUT THE PERIOD. TABLE TENNIS ALSO INCREASED CONSIDERABLY, WHILE AMATEUR DRAMATICS EXPERIENCED A SIGNIFICANT DECLINE. THE NUMBERS FOR MATERIAL ARTS AND MUSICAL PERFORMANCES CHANGED OVER THER PERIOD.
IN 2000, AROUND 64 PEOPLE ARE PARTICIPATE IN FILM CLUB. THE NUMBER DECLINED GRADUALLY TO ABOUT 58 IN 2010, AND RISE AGAIN IN 2020 APPROXIMATELY 63 PERSONS.
THE NUMBER OF PEOPLE PLAYING TABLE TENNIS WAS ABOUT 16 IN 2000. BUT IT ROSE SLIGHTLY TO 18 IN 2010. AND THEN THE PARTICIPANTS REACH SHARPLY AROUND 34 IN 2015 AND 50 IN 2020. WHICH WAS THE HIGHEST POINT OVER THE ENTIRE PERIOD.
FINALLY, MUSICAL PERFORMANCE HAD ALMOST NO PARTICIPANTS IN 2000 AND STILL NO FIGURE IN 2005, BUT THE FIGURE INCREASED IN 2020 FOR ONLY 15.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response attempts to summarise the graph by identifying the main activities and reporting some general trends and specific figures. However, the introduction is incomplete as it is written as a fragment ('THE GRAPH ILLUSTRATES THAT...') rather than a full statement. Furthermore, there are several inaccurate data reports in the body paragraphs; for instance, the student states that in 2000 around 64 people participated in the film club (whereas the graph shows 70) and states that musical performances had almost no participants in 2000 and 2005, which misreads the categories or timeline. The overview provides some general comparisons, but overall development and accuracy are hindered by data misinterpretation and structural flaws. This places the response at Band 5.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The text is divided into paragraphs, which helps organise the content into an introduction, overview, and body details. However, logical progression is frequently disrupted by mechanical and faulty transitions, such as starting sentences with conjunctions or awkward connectives ('AND THEN THE PARTICIPANTS REACH SHARPLY...'). Referencing and cohesive devices are inadequate at times, making the flow somewhat disjointed and repetitive in structure. Paragraphing is attempted, but internal cohesion lacks smooth transitions between ideas, leading to a Band 5 performance for this criterion.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The student demonstrates a limited but minimally adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms such as 'popular', 'decline', 'increase', and 'gradually'. However, there are noticeable vocabulary and collocation errors, such as 'material arts' instead of 'martial arts', 'persons' instead of 'people', and 'reach sharply' instead of 'rose sharply'. Spelling and word-choice inaccuracies cause some confusion for the reader, but the message remains partially clear. These features align with the Band 5 descriptors.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The student attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, but control is weak. There are frequent grammatical errors, such as tense confusion and awkward verb forms (e.g., '64 people are participate', 'rise again in 2020 approximately 63 persons', and 'the figure increased in 2020 for only 15'). Punctuation is also problematic, with sentence fragments used instead of complete clauses. These frequent errors cause difficulty for the reader and reflect typical Band 5 characteristics.
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