Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-12
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The given graph illustrates the information on the number of candidates for different activities in Melbourne at one social centre, Australia for the time period 2000 to 2020,Overall, it can be seen that the most significant feature is film club which has most number of participants for the period 2000 to 2020.
Now turning into the details, Film club has most number of candidates with constant value 65 from 2000 to 2020 with just a small drop down in 2010 with value almost 60. In addition, table tennis has almost under 20 number of candidates with a rapid rise and end on just above 50 number of candidates in 2020.Furthermore, amateur dramatics initially has under 30 number of candidates in 2000 and then it rapidly decreases to under 10 in 2020.Moreover, musical performances has 0 number in 2000 with a initial value start in 2010 and goes to almost 15 number of candidates in 2020. Finally, martial arts is also one of most stable activity has under 40 number of candidates with end it at same almost 35 number of participants in 2020.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
The response covers all parts of the task by reporting on the different activities at the social centre from 2000 to 2020. An overview is attempted, pointing out that the film club had the most participants overall. Key features and comparisons are made across the categories, such as table tennis experiencing a rapid rise and amateur dramatics decreasing. However, some data points are described a bit imprecisely or awkwardly, such as describing musical performances as having '0 number' in 2000 and martial arts ending at 'same almost 35 number of participants'. Additionally, the overview could be more comprehensive by capturing a second major trend alongside the film club. Nonetheless, all categories are addressed, earning a Band 6.0.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The text is arranged with an introduction containing the overview, followed by a single large body paragraph. Paragraphing is weak because the entire body of data is crammed into one block rather than being divided logically, which impacts the overall organization. Cohesive devices are used, but they are sometimes repetitive or awkwardly introduced, such as 'Now turning into the details', 'In addition', 'Furthermore', 'Moreover', and 'Finally'. Referencing is generally clear, but the lack of paragraph breaks detracts from the logical progression and overall cohesion, placing this response at Band 5.0.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary used is adequate for the task, allowing the student to describe trends with terms like 'significant feature', 'constant value', 'rapid rise', and 'rapidly decreases'. However, there is a lack of flexibility and precision, leading to repetitive phrasing such as 'number of candidates' and 'number of participants' used repeatedly. There are also unnatural collocations and word choices, such as 'constant value 65', 'drop down', '0 number', and 'stable activity has under 40 number of candidates'. Spelling is generally accurate, but the limited control of less common lexical items caps this score at Band 5.5.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The student attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, such as 'Overall, it can be seen that the most significant feature is film club which has most number of participants...' However, control over grammar and punctuation is inconsistent. There are several grammatical errors and awkward structures, including punctuation issues (missing spaces after commas, a comma splice in the introduction), missing articles ('is film club', 'has most number'), and tense inconsistencies or clunky phrasing like 'with end it at same almost 35 number of participants'. Because errors occur frequently and occasionally make sentences clumsy, the grammar aligns with Band 5.0.
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