Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-12
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The line graph presents an information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020. This report illustrates main features and relevant comparisons between Film club, Table tennis, Martial arts, Amateur dramatics and Musical performance.
Most popular activity in which people taking a part is the film club that remained more than 60% which is the highest percentage throughout the years of 2000 to 2020 comparative to other activities. Despite table tennis fluctuates in these 5 years, initially in 2000 more than 10% people participated and number of participants increased by 20% in 2005 furthermore, it remained same till 2010. After that report shows significant growth of table tennis from 2010 to 2020.
Moreover, in between 30% to 40% of the participants took part in martial arts in these years.
In 2000 to 2005 approximately 20% to 30% people participated in the amateur dramatics which declined considerably afterwards.
Furthermore, musical performances were virtually none in 2000 and just started in 2005. Gradually it rose from 2010 to 2020 and arrived at the number of 10.5%.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The student successfully reports the main features and makes relevant comparisons across the five activities shown in the graph. The overview is somewhat integrated into the introduction and body paragraphs, capturing the highest participant rates for the film club and the general trends for table tennis, martial arts, amateur dramatics, and musical performances. Key figures and percentages, such as the film club remaining above 60 percent and musical performances starting around 2005, are appropriately cited. However, there are some minor inaccuracies in reading the data, such as referring to 'the number of 10.5%' when the scale represents percentages, and some data points are slightly vague. Nevertheless, all parts of the task are addressed, and the response meets the requirements for a Band 6.0.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The response demonstrates a clear overall arrangement and logical progression, moving from an introductory statement to specific body paragraphs detailing each activity. Paragraphing is used appropriately to separate different data categories. However, cohesive devices are sometimes mechanical or awkwardly deployed, as seen with transitions like 'Furthermore' and 'Moreover'. Referencing is occasionally slightly unclear, for example, the connection between sentences in the second paragraph regarding table tennis. While cohesive relationships are generally maintained, the occasional clunky linking phrases place this performance securely in the Band 6.0 range.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The student uses an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, successfully attempting less common items and descriptive terms such as 'fluctuates', 'significant growth', and 'declined considerably'. However, there are several lexical errors and awkward word choices, such as 'presents an information', 'Most popular activity in which people taking a part', and 'arrived at the number of'. Spelling is generally accurate, but inappropriate word forms and articles slightly impede precise communication. This corresponds to the descriptors for Band 5.5, as the vocabulary is minimally adequate with noticeable errors.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The writer attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, incorporating relative clauses and temporal markers like 'throughout the years of 2000 to 2020 comparative to other activities'. However, there are frequent grammatical errors, particularly with missing articles ('presents an information', 'Most popular activity'), incorrect verb forms ('people taking a part', 'table tennis fluctuates' in past context), and awkward prepositions. While these errors do not completely impede communication, they are persistent throughout the text. Control of grammar and punctuation aligns best with a Band 5.0.
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