Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-12
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 6.0)
As far as this graphic description is concerned, the given graph shows information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Overall, it is clear that there are some noticeable trends nd differences. Some aspects increase while others decrease and a few remain relatively stable.
At the beginning of 2000, the film club had the largest number of participants around 63. Whereas, the musical performances had the lowest number or no participants. However, table tennis, amateur dramatics and martial arts had participants around 17, 27 and 36 respectively. In 2005, the number of participants for musical performances were increased significantly and then in 2010 to 2020, the numbers increased slightly. In case of table tennis, the participants increased a bit and remain relatively stable till 2010. After 2010, a significant increase was observed in 2015. After 2015, the numbers again increased significantly to around 52 participants. in case of amateur dramatics and martial arts. Amateur dramatics observed a little spike in 2005, whereas, after 2005 a decline was observed in 2010. After 2010, significant increase was observed in 2015 continuing till 2020. The martial arts observed ups and downs in the period of 2000 to 2020. Sometimes, a drop was observed and in the next years increase was observed respectively. It was a roller coaster journey for martial arts numbers. The film club remain relatively stable from 2000 to 2020. Only some slight drops were observed in 2005 and 2010.
In conclusion, the graphs presents a clear pattern of change in numbers, with some activities showing growth and others showing a decline or stability.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 6.0 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
The response covers all parts of the task well by identifying and reporting the main features, trends, and making comparisons across the activities. The opening introduces the graph accurately, and the overview captures the general trends. Key data points are selected and reported, such as the film club starting with the highest participants and musical performances having lower initial figures. However, there are some minor lapses in data precision and organisation, such as minor confusion in sentence structure when reporting figures for amateur dramatics and martial arts. Nevertheless, the response clearly addresses the prompt and presents a well-supported summary of the visual data.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The response has a clear overall arrangement with a logical sequence of introduction, overview, body details, and conclusion. Paragraphing is used appropriately to separate different sections of the report. Cohesive devices are employed, such as 'Overall', 'At the beginning of 2000', 'Whereas', and 'In conclusion'. However, cohesion is sometimes mechanical or repetitive, and referencing can become slightly cluttered in the body paragraph when multiple activities are squeezed together, such as the abrupt transitions between table tennis, amateur dramatics, and martial arts. Despite these minor issues, the progression of information remains generally clear throughout.
Lexical Resource — Band 6.0
The student uses an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, successfully attempting less common lexical items related to trends, such as 'fluctuate', 'decline', 'significant increase', and 'relatively stable'. There are some minor errors in word choice, form, and collocation, such as 'nd' (typographical error for 'and'), 'graphic description', and awkward phrasing like 'in case of amateur dramatics and martial arts'. However, these errors do not impede communication, and the vocabulary is sufficient to convey the main features and trends of the graph accurately.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0
The response displays a mix of simple and complex sentence forms. There are examples of good complex structures, such as 'While musical performances had the lowest number...', though some complex attempts contain errors. Grammatical errors and punctuation slips occur throughout the text, including missing capitalization at the beginning of sentences (e.g., 'in case of amateur dramatics'), subject-verb agreement issues (e.g., 'the film club remain'), and slight awkwardness in prepositional usage. However, these errors rarely impede communication, and the meaning of the report remains clear to the reader.
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