Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-12
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The line graph revel vital information about the numerous of participants for serval activities at one public center in Melbourne, Australia for the period of 20 years.
Overall, line graph illustrate that film club participants were significantly at his higher level then other activities. Also, material arts activity steadily grow from year 2000 to 2020 and the other activities such as Amateur dramatics, table tennis and Musical performances fluctuate from their starting point.
Starting with film club which was the noted his position at the top of the line graph from starting to ending and the number of participants was around 65 in year 2000 and its steadily maintain his level till 2020. Moreover, material arts the one of the activity that number of participants was 38 and continuously fluctuate within 30 to 40 member in period of 20 years.
In year 2000 amateur dramatics and table tennis were at 15 or 25 number of interested people but in year 2010 table tennis participants drastically rose from number 20 to 55 in year 2020.In addition, amateur dramatics number of an interested people plunge from 20 to 5 from year 210 to 2020. Also, musical performances was only one activity was starting at 2005 and continuously grown from 0 to 18 till 2020.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
The response covers all parts of the task by reporting the main features of the graph and making relevant comparisons between the different activities over the 20-year period. An overview is provided in the second paragraph, identifying the highest category (film club) and noting general trends such as steady growth in martial arts and fluctuations in other activities. Specific data points from the graph, such as starting and ending numbers, are integrated into the body paragraphs. However, some data references are slightly imprecise or awkward, such as "at 15 or 25 number of interested people", and certain details lack full contextual integration. Overall, the response fulfills the requirements of Task 1 well, earning a band score of 6.0.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The text is structured into logical paragraphs with an introduction, an overview, and separate body paragraphs grouping the data logically. Cohesive devices and transition markers are used, such as "Starting with", "Moreover", and "In addition", though some are used mechanically or awkwardly, as seen in "Starting with film club which was the noted his position". Paragraphing is present and appropriate for the task. Referencing is sometimes unclear due to grammatical errors, for instance, "material arts the one of the activity". The overall arrangement is coherent enough to guide the reader through the data, supporting a band score of 5.5.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is adequate for the task, attempting less common items such as "fluctuate", "drastically rose", and "plunge". However, there are numerous lexical and spelling errors throughout the response, including "revel" instead of reveal, "numerous" instead of number, "serval" instead of several, "material arts" instead of martial arts, and "his" used incorrectly for possessive reference. While these errors do not completely impede communication, they restrict the lexical score. The range of vocabulary is sufficient to convey the main trends, resulting in a band score of 5.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response demonstrates a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but grammatical accuracy is weak. There are frequent errors in verb forms, subject-verb agreement, prepositions, and articles, such as "The line graph revel vital information", "participants was significantly at his higher level", and "year 210" instead of 2010. Punctuation errors are also present, including missing spaces after full stops. Complex structures are often faulty, and errors require the reader to occasionally reread sentences to grasp the intended meaning. Consequently, a band score of 5.0 is appropriate.
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