Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-12
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
This illustration give information about players of different media activities in Melbourne, Australia during the duration of 2000 to 2020. Overall, the ratio of players of Amateur dramatic increasced during 2000 to 2020.
It is quite evident from chart that participant of film club and Martial arts in 2000 to 2020. In 2000 almost 65 player join Film club and almost 36 participant work as a Martial arts. This number of ratio were decreased for few years after that the ratio suddenly raise and reach almost 70 player in 2020 for only in Film club. The ratio of Martial arts raised in 2010 but after this year the ratio was again decreased and reached almost 39 players in2020.
Furthermore, this also gives information about the players of Table tennis, Musical performances and Amateur arts between the 2000 to 2020. In 2000 no one join in Musical performances but almost 17 players join the team of the Table tennis suddenly this number of participant was increased in 2010 and reached almost 57 players in 20120. The participants of Amateur dramatics was decreased during 2000 to 2005 after that this ratio was increased for few years after that they was again decreased and reach almost 37 players in 2020.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The student attempts to cover the main features of the chart, providing an overview and mentioning data for several activities such as the film club, martial arts, and table tennis. However, the response suffers from significant inaccuracies in reporting data, such as claiming 'no one join in Musical performances' when the graph likely shows participants, and misinterpreting years like '20120'. Furthermore, the description of trends is somewhat vague and imprecise, stating that figures 'suddenly raise' or 'decreased for few years'. While the prompt is generally addressed, the task response is hindered by underdeveloped descriptions and data misreporting, placing it firmly at a Band 5.0 level.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The text is organized into paragraphs, with an introduction and separate body paragraphs dedicated to different activities. However, the overall progression is difficult to follow due to repetitive phrasing ('The ratio of...', 'after that the ratio...') and mechanical use of cohesive devices. Referencing is frequently unclear, leaving the reader confused about which activity or year is being discussed, especially with awkward transitions like 'Furthermore, this also gives information'. Paragraphing is present, but internal cohesion is faulty and repetitive, characteristic of a Band 5.0 performance.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The student's vocabulary is very limited and repetitive, heavily relying on words like 'ratio', 'players', 'participant', and 'increase/decrease'. There are frequent inappropriate word choices and collocations, such as 'players of different media activities' and 'work as a Martial arts' instead of 'participants in martial arts'. Spelling and morphological errors are also present, such as 'increasced', 'participant' instead of participants, and typos like '20120'. The lexical range is minimally adequate for conveying basic information, but frequent errors cause strain for the reader, aligning with Band 4.5 or 5.0; a score of 5.0 is appropriate given the attempt at task-specific vocabulary.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5
The response features a very limited range of grammatical structures, consisting mostly of simple and awkwardly constructed complex sentences. There are frequent and systematic errors in basic grammar, subject-verb agreement, and tense consistency, such as 'This illustration give information', 'Amateur dramatic increasced', and 'no one join'. Punctuation errors are also apparent, including missing spaces and run-on phrasing. Because attempts at complex structures are almost invariably flawed and frequent errors cause difficulty, the grammar falls into the Band 4.0 to 4.5 range, with 4.5 reflecting the understandable core message despite heavy inaccuracies.
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