Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-12
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The graphs charts illustrutes the statistics of different kind of social activities in one social center between 2000 to 2020 in melbourne , Australia
Overall , the participants of film club was the tend over the period. Musical performances was lowest at the beginning and increased day by day while amateur dramatics started with 25 students and peacked at 5 students end of the periods
the flim club participants was the highest members in the social centre and incresed all over the period but there was a slight drop in 2010 and reached at nearly 70. the martial arts members was unconsistant end of the period . the table tennis students begging with only 16 members and rose 20 in 2005 then remained stable the following year . After 2010 the tennis memebers started to went up and peacked at 53 by 2020 .while the amateur dramatics and musical performances participants was 25 and 0 respectively at the beginning where by 2020 the students of amateur dramatics was 5 and the members of musical performances was almost 20.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The student attempts to address the task by reporting on several activities from the graph, such as the film club, table tennis, amateur dramatics, and musical performances. However, the response lacks a clear overview and fails to provide a comprehensive summary of the main features and comparisons. Several data points are inaccurate or poorly communicated, such as stating that amateur dramatics peaked at 5 students at the end of the period when it actually started higher and dropped, or stating that the film club reached nearly 70. The information is presented in a somewhat disjointed manner without a clear logical structure. These limitations place the response at Band 5.0 according to the task achievement descriptors.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The text is divided into three paragraphs, including a brief introduction and body paragraphs. However, the overall organisation lacks a clear progression and logical flow. Cohesive devices are minimal, repetitive, or inaccurate, with phrases like 'day by day' and 'the following year' used awkwardly. Referencing is sometimes unclear, and punctuation errors further disrupt the flow of information. Paragraphing is attempted, but the internal structure of the body paragraphs lacks cohesion, leading to a confusing reading experience. This aligns closely with Band 5.0 descriptors for coherence and cohesion.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The student demonstrates a limited and minimally adequate vocabulary range suitable for describing basic trends and figures, such as 'increased', 'stable', and 'highest'. However, there are frequent spelling errors ('illustrutes', 'peacked', 'flim', 'incresed', 'unconsistant', 'memebers') and inappropriate word choices ('went up', 'begging'). These lexical errors and limitations cause noticeable difficulty for the reader and restrict the score to Band 4.5 or 5.0. Given the basic control and frequent slips, a band score of 5.0 is appropriate.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The response features a very limited range of grammatical structures, consisting mostly of simple sentences and flawed attempts at complex clauses. There are frequent grammatical and punctuation errors throughout the text, such as missing capitalisation, incorrect prepositions ('at the beginning where by 2020'), and subject-verb agreement issues ('the participants... was'). While the meaning can sometimes be deciphered, the high frequency of errors causes significant difficulty for the reader, fitting the Band 4.0 descriptors well.
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