Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-12
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
the given diagram illustrates the amount of participants for various activities at a specific social platform in different countries for the period of two decades from 2000 to 2020.
to initiate the discussion with the activity name as Musical performances while public take intrest in it in year 2025 and only 15 to 20 individuals takr interest in it. then comes to TAble tennis, in begning only a small group join this afterwards their noticed a darastic increase till 2020.
the next one is Amateur dramatics in which lack of engagement of public shows according to data. martial arts, joined by 30 to 35 persons throughout the period while the same situation is noticed in film club that the number of participants remains almost same or just slightly increase or decrease is noticed.
In Conclusion, the lack of interest of public is seen in Music and the significant attraction is noticed in table tennis.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The student attempts to address the task by mentioning several activities such as musical performances, table tennis, amateur dramatics, and martial arts. However, there are significant inaccuracies in the interpretation of the visual data. For instance, the student refers to the year 2025, which falls outside the given 2000 to 2020 timeframe, and mislocates the social centre to 'different countries' rather than Melbourne, Australia. Furthermore, the descriptions of trends are vague and lack specific data support, offering generalized statements like 'a small group join this afterwards their noticed a darastic increase till 2020'. While the main features are touched upon, the response suffers from underdeveloped ideas and inaccurate reporting of details, placing it firmly at a Band 5.0.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The response is organized into four brief paragraphs, attempting an introductory overview, body points, and a concluding sentence. However, the overall progression is disjointed and lacks a clear logical flow. Cohesive devices are either missing, repetitive, or awkward, such as 'to initiate the discussion with the activity name' and 'then comes to TAble tennis'. Paragraphing is visibly weak, with body information grouped loosely and some sentences running together without proper punctuation. Referencing between ideas is frequently unclear, making it difficult for the reader to track the comparisons being made. This corresponds to the Band 5.0 descriptors for logical organization and paragraphing.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is very limited and basic, resulting in frequent errors that impede communication. The student relies heavily on repetitive phrasing like 'participants', 'activity', and 'interest in it'. There are numerous word choice and collocation errors, such as 'amount of participants' instead of 'number of participants', 'social platform' instead of 'social centre', and 'public take intrest'. Spelling errors are also present, including 'takr', 'begning', and 'darastic'. While the student attempts some less common words like 'engagement' and 'significant', the high frequency of lexical inaccuracies and poor control over word forms restricts the score to a Band 4.5, rounded to 5.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5
The grammatical range is severely restricted, consisting mainly of flawed attempts at complex sentences. The text contains frequent grammatical and punctuation errors that cause difficulty for the reader. Examples include fragment sentences ('to initiate the discussion with the activity name as Musical performances while public take intrest in it in year 2025') and subject-verb agreement issues ('the number of participants remains almost same or just slightly increase or decrease is noticed'). Punctuation is largely neglected, with sentences lacking proper capitalization and terminal periods in places. Due to the high density of structural errors and the lack of error-free sentences, a score of 4.5 is warranted, which is represented as 4.5.
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