Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-13
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
The line graph illustrates the changes on the number of participants for different activities such as Film club, Martial art, Amateur dramatics, Table tennis and Musical performances at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia over a twenty year period between 2000 and 2020.
Overall, three number of participants like Film club, Table tennis and Musical performances accounted the upward trend while Martial arts represented the remained relatively stable minor fluctuations. Moreover, Amateur drametics participant showed the drametic fall
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response is severely under-length, containing only 78 words compared to the required minimum of 150 words. Because of this major omission, the task cannot be fully addressed. The student attempts an introduction and a brief overview, mentioning several activities such as Film club, Table tennis, and Musical performances, and identifies general trends like upward movements and a dramatic fall. However, the response completely lacks a body paragraph with detailed data comparisons, which is essential for a Band 6 or higher. The failure to meet the word count requirement heavily penalises the task achievement score, resulting in a band 4.0 as it responds to the task only minimally.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The response is structured into a brief introduction and an overview paragraph, but it is far too short to demonstrate effective paragraphing or cohesive progression. While basic cohesive markers such as 'Overall' and 'Moreover' are attempted, referencing and transitions are awkward. For instance, 'three number of participants like Film club...' lacks clear syntactic integration, and sentences break off abruptly due to the truncated nature of the writing. There is a lack of logical organisation and progression because the data is not fully presented or developed. Therefore, the coherence and cohesion are limited, aligning with the descriptors for a band 4.0.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary used is basic and heavily repetitive, with noticeable word choice and spelling errors. For example, the student writes 'Martial art' instead of 'Martial arts', 'remained relatively stable minor fluctuations' which is grammatically confused, and 'drametic fall' with a spelling error. Phrases like 'accounted the upward trend' misuse standard collocations. Although the student attempts to name specific activities and trends, the limited range and frequent lexical inaccuracies mean that vocabulary is basic and strains the reader at times. This corresponds to a band 4.0 for lexical resource.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The grammatical range is extremely limited, consisting of just a few overly complex or poorly structured sentences. There are several noticeable grammatical errors, such as 'changes on the number' (instead of 'changes in'), 'three number of participants like...' which lacks a predicate, and missing punctuation at the end of the final sentence ('dramatic fall'). The majority of sentences contain errors or awkward phrasing that can cause difficulty for the reader. Given the extremely restricted output and frequent structural inaccuracies, the grammar falls into the band 4.0 category.
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