Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-13
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The line graph illustrates proportion of people that took part in five club activities at a social center in Melbourne, Australia between 2000 and 2020.
Overall, it is immediately clear that martial arts remained at the highest level. Additionally, musical performances started in year 2005 and gradually the number of individuals that took part in it increased.
In 2000, the film club had roughly 64 members through out the period this number saw a slight drop reaching year 2020 the number of members increased to 65. In contrast, amateur dramatics which had 26 participants in 2000 after a surge their number plummeted in 2020 only 6 individuals remained.
There was a dramatic increase in ratio of members in table tennis as it gained popularity in 2010. The number of members in this club peaked in 2020 and reached 54. Meanwhile, The proportion of members in amateur dramatics fluctuated through out the period and was recorded 35 in 2020. On the other hand, Musical performances started in year 2005 and kept growing in 2020 its members were 20.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The student attempts to address the task by reporting on the main features of the graph, such as the trends for martial arts and the introduction of musical performances in 2005. However, there are significant factual inaccuracies and contradictions in the data reported. For instance, the student states that the film club had 'roughly 64 members through out the period', but then mentions it increased to 65 in 2020, while also confusing the categories and figures for amateur dramatics and table tennis later in the response (e.g., repeating amateur dramatics with conflicting numbers). While an overview is attempted, the data selection and reporting lack accuracy and clarity. Because of these noticeable inaccuracies in covering the prompt's details, the response achieves a Band 5.5 for Task Achievement.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The response has an overall structure with an introduction, overview, and body paragraphs, though the grouping of information is somewhat confused by data inaccuracies. Cohesive devices such as 'Overall', 'In addition', 'In contrast', and 'Meanwhile' are used to connect ideas, but their effectiveness is undermined by the confusing and contradictory data presented. Paragraphing is attempted, but the body paragraphs are disjointed due to mixed information about the different activities. Referencing is occasionally unclear, such as repeating 'amateur dramatics' in different contexts with contradictory numbers. This level of organisation and cohesion aligns best with a Band 6.0 descriptor, where the overall arrangement is visible but cohesion is sometimes faulty.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The student demonstrates an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, attempting words and phrases such as 'proportion', 'gradually', 'plummeted', 'fluctuated', and 'popularity'. However, there are notable inaccuracies in word choice and collocation, such as confusing 'proportion' and 'number', and awkward phrasings like 'reached year 2020'. Furthermore, spelling and word choice errors appear, though they do not completely impede communication. Less common lexical items are attempted with mixed success. Because the vocabulary is adequate yet contains noticeable errors and slight imprecisions in reporting statistical data, the lexical resource is graded at a Band 6.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The student uses a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, such as 'Additionally, musical performances started in year 2005 and gradually the number of individuals that took part in it increased.' There are several grammatical errors and awkward structures, including missing prepositions, tense inconsistencies, and punctuation issues (e.g., comma splices and run-on sentences like 'In 2000, the film club had roughly 64 members through out the period this number saw a slight drop reaching year 2020 the number of members increased to 65'). Despite these errors, the meaning is generally decipherable, placing the grammatical performance firmly within the Band 5.5 descriptor due to frequent errors in complex structures.
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