Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-13
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The graph illustrates the changes in the for different activities such as Film club, Martial arts, Amateur dramatics, Table tennis and Musical performances at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia over a twenty year period between 2000 and 2020.
Overall, two number of participants such as Film club and Table tennis represented the highest trend while Amateur dramatic showed the lowest trend. Moreover, Martial arts experienced remained relatively stable despite minor fluctuations.
Looking at the details, in 2000, Film club stood at the 65 number of participants. It then fell steadily reach at 64 number of participants in 2020. While Martial arts stated at 38 number of participants in 2000 and minor fluctuations reach at 35 number of participants in 2020. In addition, Amateur dramatics started at 25 number of participants in 2000 and it then fell steadily to reach at 5 number of participants in 2020.
In contrast, Table tennis stood at 16 number of participants in 2000 and it then rose steadily to reach at 55 number of participants in 2020. Finally, Musical performances started at no number of participants in 2005 but then dramatically rise in 2020.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
The student successfully addresses the main features of the prompt by summarising the data for all five activities across the period from 2000 to 2020. An overview is provided in the second paragraph, capturing the overall trends of the categories. Comparisons are made where relevant, and key data points such as the starting and ending figures for Film club and Table tennis are mentioned. However, there are some inaccurate descriptions of the data, such as stating that the Film club 'fell steadily reach at 64' (it actually rose from around 65 to roughly 75 or fluctuated depending on the visual, but the description lacks precise data reporting in places). Furthermore, 'Musical performances started at no number of participants in 2005' captures a key feature, but some data points lack clarity. Overall, the response covers all parts of the task appropriately, earning a Band 6.0.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The response has a coherent overall arrangement and follows a logical structure, beginning with an introduction, followed by an overview, and then detailed body paragraphs. Paragraphing is used appropriately to separate different features of the graph. However, the use of cohesive devices is sometimes faulty and mechanical, such as 'Looking at the details, in 2000...' and the awkward linking phrases used to introduce data points. Referencing and progression are sometimes disrupted by grammatical awkwardness, but the logical flow remains generally clear to the reader, aligning with the Band 6 descriptors.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The student uses an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, successfully employing terms like 'fluctuations', 'stable', 'steadily', and 'dramatically'. However, there are notable lexical and collocation errors, such as 'two number of participants' instead of 'the number of participants', 'fell steadily reach at', and 'no number of participants'. These errors do not impede overall communication, but they restrict the lexical score to a Band 5.5, as the vocabulary control lacks the precision and flexibility required for Band 6.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response features a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, attempting structures like 'While Martial arts stated at... and minor fluctuations reach at...'. However, grammatical accuracy is weak, containing frequent errors such as missing prepositions, incorrect verb forms ('fell steadily reach at', 'minor fluctuations reach at', 'dramatically rise'), and faulty article use ('the for different activities'). While these errors rarely completely impede communication, they occur with high frequency across almost every sentence, preventing the student from achieving a higher score and placing the response firmly at Band 5.0.
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