Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-13
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The illustrated graph depicts information on the numbers of participants for diverse activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the timeline of [redacted phone]. Respectively, activities involved Flim club, Martial arts, Amateure dramattics, Table tennis and Muscical performances.
The graph represents that, the Film club's participants were almost 65% in 2000 and increased to approximately 66% in 2020. Martial arts participation was around 36% in 2000 and reached to around 37%. Amateur dramatics participation were around 25% in 2000 and decreased to approximately 6% in 2020. Table tennis players were about 17% in 2000 and constantly increased to about 53%. Musical performances participations were at 0% in 2005 and increased to approximately 13% in 2020.
In comparison, the film club had more participation and table tennis beome second. However, Amateur dramatics decreased drastically to lowest participants. Musical performances started from very low, however managed to reached at second last.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The student attempts to address the prompt by reporting information from the graph, such as mentioning the starting and ending participation figures for the Film club, Martial arts, Amateur dramatics, Table tennis, and Musical performances. However, there are notable limitations. The student refers to percentages throughout the response (e.g., almost 65%), whereas the prompt actually indicates numbers of participants rather than percentages, suggesting a misinterpretation of the vertical axis. Furthermore, while some main features and comparisons are attempted in the final paragraph, the data reporting contains inaccuracies and lacks full development. Overall, the response addresses the task only partially, aligning closely with the Band 5 descriptors.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The response is structured into three paragraphs, providing some basic organisation. However, there is a lack of clear overall progression and logical sequencing of ideas. Cohesive devices are minimal and sometimes awkward, such as the abrupt use of 'Respectively' in the opening sentence and 'In comparison' to introduce the overview. Referencing and linking between sentences are occasionally faulty, and paragraphing is underdeveloped, with the second paragraph clumping multiple disparate data points together without adequate transitions. These features place the response at Band 5.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The student uses a limited vocabulary range that is minimally adequate for the task, with several spelling errors ('Flim', 'Amateure', 'dramattics', 'Muscical', 'beome') and awkward word choices ('managed to reached at second last'). While there are attempts to use less common verbs and adverbs like 'constantly increased' and 'decreased drastically', the noticeable errors in spelling and collocation cause some difficulty for the reader and prevent the response from achieving a higher band, making Band 5 an appropriate score.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The writer attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, such as subordinate clauses ('while some main features...', though mostly in the student's own constructions like 'The graph represents that...'). However, there are frequent grammatical errors, including tense inconsistencies, missing prepositions, and awkward phrasing such as 'participations were at 0%' and 'managed to reached'. These errors recur throughout the text and occasionally impede clear communication, which is characteristic of the Band 5 descriptor level.
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